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Night Feast

Missing image

Pain of the broken,
reflected in smiles
echoes and whispers
carried for miles.

Solitary thoughts within
obcessions ripple and scream
coppery tastes upon my tongue
no longer just a dream,
visions burst, collapse, implode
heart beats now aquiver
thoughts bounce deep inside

causing membranes to shiver.


Silently fluttering stirs
alighting wings of your soul
shrivel in flames to burn
turning darker than coal.
Dawns stillness is shattered
beyond heart felt pleas
a moment wrapped in joy
amongst tormented debris.

Eyes torn wide in horror
a stare frozen like ice
slowly killing each one
you did not think twice,
bones crushed to dust
ripped veins that bleed
made it all to easy
for you to tear and feed.

Displaced anguish rebounds
rushing through light,
confirming to all doubters
your still queen of the night.

Author notes

Hope its not to late! Wow, not written anything in like months...talk about rusty! Big thanks to fritz for helping me tweak

Pic credit Jeanette Ardley Photography @ http://www.sombredreams.com/apps/photos/photo?photoid=18121261

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Comments

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  • raggyann
    October 27

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    ya this is dark but you wrote it so well
    i liked it


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    September 28

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    you are too good! this sent shivers up and down my spine. bring it on, oh daughter of the darkness! Great stuff for this time of the year... Scary~
    congrats on the gold


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 9

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    omg I suck.. how could I have missed this? Damn those people who write 20 poems a day and fill up the damn list. So sorry hunny

    But anyway.. WAHOO back to your macbre best here hunny! As the Gold shiney attests to


  • PastelMoons gold member
    June 23

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    You haven't lost you touch!!
    This is magic!!!
    Congrats on the well derserved
    Gold!!!



    ~Pastel


  • Sf
    June 21

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    WOW!

    I loved the way this flows and the picture it paints. Is it too creepy if I say I found this kind of peaceful?


  • Firequeen
    June 20

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    This beautifuly dark my dear.
    it invites the reader in, commanding their undivided attention.
    like the whole piece but the last few line sent this home for me.
    Thank you for this wonderful read.
    keep the dark ink flowing
    glad i could give you some inspiration
    fire


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    June 19

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    No probs Sis, my pleasure as always...
    Awesome write with great imagery, flowing narrative & makes for a compelling read throughout...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!

  • Firequeen
    June 8
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    Here you go my dear have fun
    Hope it inspires your dark side
    http://www.sombredreams.com/apps/photos/photo?photoid=18121261

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