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Break free..

The night has just passed me by
And a new day has just began
I have been liberated
From many tears and many fears
Others also have feelings
Except for years, all I ever had, were stings...
I am no longer bottled up inside
I have aimed to break free, even from within…
As the sun grows light from the dawn
As the sky craves for the shining star
Now, I am here to claim
The Milky Way is on my trail....

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  • Lencio Rodrigues
    July 28
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    Wow! brilliant all the way!


  • crivanea silver member
    June 24

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    interesting perspective..i assume the I i the poem is mother earth? a new day always begin anew..but by the end of the day, r the starts still there? thank u for entering


  • blueyez
    June 8
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    grab those stars!


  • oldschooldee1
    June 8

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    cute poem the start was way cool!! think you could have put a lil more time to this but what do I know lol