I'm laying back on the rock, the wine flowing through my body,
i look up at him and smile as he's standing over me,
he leans over and kisses me, his lips feel so soft,
when he walks away i tell him i havent had enough.
he laughs and says those stupid words, "this is only for tonight",
i try to just smile because i know that he is right.
on the ground, under the stars, i become another notch in his belt,
nothing special, he didn't care about how i felt.
im just a one night stand girl, that's all i'll ever be,
so call me a slut, whore, i know that's me.
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this sucks im just getting it out now. im a slut and im tired of my life. wonderful
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There is no need to feel remorse for in these words you speak the truth, these nights we sometimes share in single instances well they are there to enrich our understanding of the human condition.
It is not all that to be a slut for remember the other party is the same, you gave of something they craved and he gave you only a moment of reprieve from the constant searching of that which you yourself do crave.
If anything remember to always love yourself above all else and eventualy all things will fall into place and you will learn to look back and reflect on those moments as times in which your inner beast had its moment of carnal feast.
I like it, I like it so!
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i hope one day i can look back at it and not feel that guilty feeling that i get. thank you so much for your comment
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A few "one night stands" may enrich you to find that right person. I don't look at you as those few choice words used in your poem. Maybe you were not special to the jerks who only wanted notches in their belts or bragging rights, but in the end for them it's their loss. You will one day find that one who will treat you special as the nights will be repeated under the stars. You both will love and share the wonderful feelings of no longer being that one night stand. Then you will know for the times you wrote about, was just a piece of history making the day better for that someone special in each others' eyes. You're young and you truly will find that right person, just never give up.
Ted E
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ah i pray your right! thank you so much for your comment!
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You're very welcome and just allow time to make it happen
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hey
i forgot to add this in my other comment ,i liked this line -'im just a one night stand girl, that's all i'll ever be,
so call me a slut, whore, i know that's me.'
very clever ending , the guy in this poem seems like such a silly guy.
this is one of those poems that are short and sweet and i like reading them over and over again , wonderful .
byyyyyyyyyye -
kool
kool poem =),you have a unique style of writing , wow , wonderful k.
byyyyyyyyyye k
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Ouch. Well I'm sure that's not true, but I am also sure it feels that way right now. It's good to get things off our chest sometimes though isn't it!
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Awesome Poem
I wouldn't change a single word in this poem. I think that would risk losing the poem's genuineness in it's emotion. I love this poem for one reason over any other, and that reason sets it apart from many poems these days. That reason is its honesty. It's not grandiose, yet it's emotional. There are no lies in this poem about forever, but at the same time it's not the end of the world. To achieve this happy medium and still have such a wonderful poem that the reader can deeply feel... well, that's something special - something that most people will never be able to write.
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welldone,
i feel as if i haven't read one of your writes in awhile. this was something good to come back to. well done i loved every second of it.
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haha aww thanks
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wow!
that was awesome! it saddens me though, to think that there are guys out there that just look for a "notch in the belt" and how many people are subjected to false promises and manipulation. dont let these guys bring you down though, theyre not worth the bother. when you find a mr right guy youl know, and i say "A" mr right guy cos there are usually many in the course of ones life. sex will be more than sex, time is timeless in their eyes and you smile from the inside constantly and it wont matter what theyre saying to you as long as youre hearing their voice i hope this helps, have a good evening darlin
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aw that helps more than you could ever know! i really really hope your right.
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Do not change a thing!
it is raw emotion and very beautiful. you should never cesor your emotions. mine are killing me but at least i can write well in between the tears. keep it up. -
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thank you so much
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wow uma guy but i feel way ure sayin... u sound like a sweet person and im sure you fill find someone
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thank you so much
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You just sent me a message saying you'll try your hardest [to be happy]. I think we should begin by changing the attitude your author notes suggest you have about yourself!
Good poem.
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ya your probably right on that...i just really don't like myself anymore
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How cruel. No, he didn't care how you felt, and to be used like that is very painful. Hang in there, hon, there are good men out there as well, trust me!
This is a great poem because you got to say what you had to say, and it doesn't need any revision because this is how you felt at the time - any changes to the poem would only change those feelings as well. Leave it as it is, it's good!
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i so hope your right...
thank you for commenting
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