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Meaning Undefined

Municipal devices overwhelming odium,

Much like the digital pipe dreams of smoked enclosures.
Blood soaked calamities of gliding thoughts,  
Cut open the stitching of a backwards mute mime.
Calculate the casualties of reversed memory,
And let flow the actuality of scriptural dogma.
I think a snake flew to the blind eyes of mask,
Only to find a tempest legislature.
A man with heavy eyes floats along cosmic glass.
Numerous percentiles wear an excessive amount of jewels,

Only to find that gems are an out of date work of fiction.

Time is flying by, and tomorrow is just yesterday's lie,

Except when the truth is yielding falsities. 

Amoeba invisible, your naked eye is a whore.

Isn't there a show tonight? Ladies night.

They can't quite seem to grasp that we are I,

And "I" is next years birth, yesterday.

I forgot to remember that I suffer from amnesia. 

Am I excused? I have matters that have already been attended to.

 

Author notes

M a n i c R e v e r i e
John
Now I'm quite interested to see what people can come up with, and I do hope that this poem is reviewed a lot. For those that read this I would ask of you to please comment on your opinion of the meaning, and then pass it on to friends so that they can ponder opinions of their own. I thank any of those who will comment. Oh, and to those that read this without and allpoetry account, my e-mail is drummer_of_NEW_bORn@hotmail.com, if you place allpoetry as the subject I'll know it's good, thanks again.

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Comments

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  • lesbian-in-love
    October 19

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    This was really interesting and quite enjoyable to read. It was very well written. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • Heroesrox
    October 7
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    Interesting.

    Thanks for entering and good luck to you!


  • Antebellum
    September 4

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    I forgot to remember that I suffer from amnesia.

    I love this line.
    quite confusing, but great.
    It makes people read it over and over again to try and make sense of it.

    thanks for entering.
    good luck


  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    August 19

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    By the first line I was overwhelmed but I pushed myself to read the rest and it was worth it.

    Very descriptive.

    Favorite lines: I forgot to remember that I suffer from amnesia.

    That line made me smile sadly for some reason.

    Thank you for entering and I enjoyed your write


  • Kathraina silver member
    August 13

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    Well, I think this piece is sort of bashing religion and the way man has been brought up. We follow what we're told basically.
    We're all told different things and follow different crowds. I think you sort of cover that here.
    Anyway, this was a good piece. There's a lot left to the imaginations which makes it interesting.
    Good job, bravo



    ♥K ate


    • Manic Reverie
      August 13
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      haha why thank you, I haven't heard that take on this poem yet and I greatly welcome it for it's a tad different than the other interpretations which is the whole purpose I wrote the piece, thank you for commenting ^^.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 11

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    This was a very abstract piece,
    and well penned. It is one to be
    read over a few times to grasp
    the gist of it all.. and it can be
    left open for much interpretation.

    Wonderful work!

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 4

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    Okay, this confused me at first. So, I read it over. I will say, that it covers life all across the world in the mixed up way man thinks... all parts of life is cover here within the insane placement of your words.


    • Manic Reverie
      August 4
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      haha why thank you. Most people find this a confusing write, which indeed it is. But you did manage to take something from this which is great for a lot of people call it nonsense and give up. I love you're take on it ^^.


  • Ted E Bare gold member
    July 31

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    I think the title fits. As for what it meant to me or what I got out of it; all aspects of life taking place just like it is now all over the world no matter how big or small the even in each of our daily lives. I want to thank you for your entry into the following contest: "To Be Put On My Favorites List."

    Ted E

    PS: Your entry has been blessed by the three wise clappers, but don't spend the whole nine points in one place(lol)!


    • Manic Reverie
      August 1
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      haha thanks dude, that's a new take on that poem, and I like it, and the blessing of the three wise clappers will be used for a good cause. haha


  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 29
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    jumbled write, sentences random, expressions too

    confusing write

    thank you for entering

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