A symphony of glory stuck on repeat;
Another pathetic soul; dead
Allegro energico;
One more bloodied scream
But a fugato finale;
To make the night complete,
An empty glass of wine;
& a puddle of sanguine fluid;
The strings sing a soft lullably;
Only to be met by fate; obliteration
Repeat the theme; repeat history
Die Arbeit von genuis; & die Arbeit eines Mörders
So schön ineinandergegriffen; Tod schaute nie so hübsch
Copyright © Kira 2009
Author notes
Die Arbeit von genuis; & die Arbeit eines Mörders -----
The work of a genuis; & the work of a killer
So schön ineinandergegriffen; Tod schaute nie so hübsch ---
So beautifully intertwined; death never looked so pretty
Allegro energico--- Fast & Bright, with Energy.
fugato finale ---- A voice Finale
o h . m y . j u l i e t
Thanks for reading (:
Serial Killer
A contest entry
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Comments
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wow, the languages you've used flow so beautifully here
thank you so much for entering.
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A very dark and interesting poem.
It explains the feeling of exuberance a serial killer experiences after another dark deed very well... kudos to you.... great write.
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A whole bevy of trophies and more to come I am sure cause this is brilliant and I adored every word etched on paper with emotion and care.This is really amazing.Take care and do not forget to share ...
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This is a really nice write fully deserving of the trophies. Excellent word choice and imagery
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Repeat the theme; repeat history
Die Arbeit von genuis; & die Arbeit eines Mörders
So schön ineinandergegriffen; Tod schaute nie so hübsch
-I didn't understand it, but what I did understand filled me with bleak hope and a heavy heart, and those ending words just wouldn't make the sounds in my head, which is stunning.
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Die Arbeit von genuis; & die Arbeit eines Mörders -----
The work of a genuis; & the work of a killer
So schön ineinandergegriffen; Tod schaute nie so hübsch ---
So beautifully intertwined; death never looked so pretty
Its basically intertwining the love of Beethoven's music with serial killing, based on the book Clockwork Orange.
Thank you
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A very bleak and interesting piece that works so well within the given plot with a dark theme and tone, interesting use of *correction* German as well which is always a delight as its not something you see alot of nowadays.
Good Luck in the contest
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It's German (:
But thank you so much!
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congradulations on all the shiny trophies
A symphony of glory stuck on repeat;
Another pathetic soul; dead
Allegro energico;
One more bloodied scream
But a fugato finale;
this is stunning bravo bravo bravo
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I would like to thank you for taking the time to view and enter my contest.
Contests here on Allpoetry are a lot of fun and I hope that everyone enjoys them.
I will soon be posting a contest for BRONZE only poems. I do hope you will consider entering.
If you are dreaming, you should be writing
For dreams are words we should share
Sharing makes us all stronger
So thank you for sharing your dreams and words with me
This was an interesting piece focused on death. You typically do not find many describing death with this type of imagery. Nicely done.
Judging:
Title
I think if you used Fugato Finale it would have really captured the poem.
Content
I enjoyed the poem however, it seemed to be lacking something and I think with having to read for a translation was slightly distracting. It was depthful for being short yet I just can't put my finger on it.
Imagery
Imagery was wonderful. The symphony and the strings singing a soft lullaby.
Grammar
It appears there are a lot of semi-colons that do not seem to have a reason.
Flow
The flow was good as it was not a rhyme (so there was nothing forced). However, again, with having a translation, it slightly chopped it up a bit.
Thanks again for your entry!
Leance
A goal is a dream with a deadline.
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Excellent
Very diverse and so creative. Congratulations on all your trophies.
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Wow this is great and I loved it.Great job and good luck in my contest.
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oh, wow!
this is creepy, and pretty at the same time
good luck!
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Amazing babe =) Truly, I love this!
I like the last two lines (in English) lol.
Great job!
-Kati
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omg kira i love it!!! when i read it, my eyes were like this... @_@ lol
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fantastic take on the prompt. and I love the words written in German [if I'm not mistaken]
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Yupp (: That's German
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