As we all one by one slipped into the moon-lite clearing,
I thought about how no one else knew about our secret meetings here.
We were dressed in our finest:
the best cloths from our villiage's supply.
The ceremony was our escape;
not a soul outside our circle
of abused housewives even knew of the enchanting enclosure
in which we waltzed merrily about.
We danced, pranced, and twirled around,
feeling lighter than a feather.
For the rest of our lives we slaved over a stove,
and got beaten for doing 'wrong'.
Here, we treated eachother like royalty;
like we were one big family who understood our situations.
This was our escape from reality.
Author notes
Option 3... I guess this is kind of a sad, secretive way to think of the story behind it.
A contest entry
- June New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
This is certainly a different take on the prompt, but there is nothing wrong with it. Iknow there are many 'societies' out there for this exact type of thing going on. So why not put an image to it, and a sort of uplifting one at that- at least when in that circle of friends.
Welcome to AP and good luck in the contest.
Storm
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Nicely penned. Thanks for the ANs.
eachother needs to be pulled apart.
Mark -
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What a safe haven you have written for them, well done. You do have some spelling errors that need correcting, but great poem.
♥
Shawna
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I think you did a really good job with the prompt here and I love how you ended it. A great write, thanks for entering welcome to the site and good luck in the contest
Laura,
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" This was our escape from reality"
I loved that ending line, it was a cherry ontop of the perfect poem!
Hint: Remember, spell check is available to all members of the site, paying or non paying, simple by clicking on "edit" in your top right hand corner and then "check spelling" above your text box containing this lovely poem, try clicking it twice to ensure it loads!
Welcome to the site!
I hope you enjoy your stay with us and keep penning!
Regards
Sophie
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welcome to allpoetry
I like what you have done with this option. You added so much more to what may be behind the picture.
Well done.
Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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Yes.. This is very well written As my colleague here just stated, a great start for a new writer like you.
Escapes From reality are a Poet's birthright!! and yes,, and thats what we look forward to reading too..
Very well written.
Cheers
Archana
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Welcome to All Poetry~
Oh. A great start. Take your time, and we'll come back.
(Hint: Make friends with the spellcheck)
Warmly, CookieZeal
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