You can hear it hit softly, like the patter of little feet
As the rains softly falls I almost feel complete
I move in close, with my hands around his neck ,we embraced
I take it slow, no rush, no haste
The rain slowly falls and the full moon shines
He slides his arms around my waist, and says “your mine”
The rain picks up and it soaks our hair
But our eyes are focused, we have no cares
I whisper in his ear, “I love you my dear
“You will always be smiling, you have no use for tears
He smiles at me, with joy and bliss
My lips meet his, and in the rain we kiss
The rain itself, dances all around
As I kiss my sweetheart, without a sound
His tongue touches mine and its ecstasy
A kiss in the rain sets my emotions free
He pulls my lower lip and it takes its toll
My whole body tingles, like I’ve lost control
As the rain falls down I just can’t believe
That I need him to move, to think, to breathe
I take a step back and I look in his eyes
He tells me he loves me and my heart just flies
Author notes
I Love You,Darling!
A contest entry
- Love and Joy by Sarin Rayne.
650 points, ended June 9, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - To Be Put On My Favorites List by Ted E Bare.
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POET
And the rain, like a cleansing allows love to flow gently through two willing bodies. Oh yes that divine feeling of love. So nice .
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This is so beautiful!!
Usually I'm not a big fan of rhyme because a lot of people tend to make the rhymes sound forced, but you definitely don't have that problem.
"As the rain falls down I just can’t believe
That I need him to move, to think, to breathe"
^^^That is just gorgeous. This whole poem is gorgeous. I simply adore it.
This is so amazing and I could feel the emotions in this so well. I really love this. I don't know what else to say.
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I may be a bit biased here, for now you may understand that "kissing in the rain" gets to me every time. Of course you made every image come to life as I could see it happening right before my eyes (and I have strong imagination). I want to thank you for your entry into the following contest: "To Be Put On My Favorites List."
Ted E
PS: Your entry has been blessed by the three wise clappers, but don't spend the whole nine points in one place(lol)!
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WOW
that was like one of the best poems i have read... EVER it was soo sweet, so awesome...
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WOW
Very sweet and full of love and affection! excellent piece, nice rhyming too! you go girl!
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patter...tingles...heheh..more words i'm pointing out like..well..you know the words i like in that one poem lmao..nice job though Mandi
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Hmm, honey this is sooooooo sweet! sounds like it gonna be a fine night This is fantastic! I can't wait till I can do that hehe... what a great job you did on this one! I love it!!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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personally i love kissing in the rain its just so natural love this poem too and you of course
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wow.I really love this poem.It is beautiful.Thank you for sharing and good luck in my contest
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OMG! THIS ROCKS BUTT!
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Quenching
Rain doesn't stop the passion of love. You made the rain bring you to closer, so romantic, such sweet imagery, better than the pic to the left. Thanks for the short film you made inside my drought filled mind
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