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never as broken as before the dawn

 

 

 

 

i


she peeled away three minutes of the sunrise
and split them up
        into individual seconds
then laid them down on the glassy ocean
and watched
as each one smashed its way
into the cool depths

 

 

 

 

ii

he couldn’t decide

if the flesh of her left cheek
resembled the sun

as much as her right


so he waited
until orange balanced
on the horizon
and then he kissed her
                          twice

 

 

 

 

 

 

iii


traces of the moon
were still visible
beneath her fingernails


but the more she
clawed at the breeze
of every breath


the closer the day became

 

 

 

Author notes

"Never as broken as before the dawn"

silverscent


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  • whitecoffee
    June 22

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    Oh wow! Congrats on the gold, this was awesome, especially the first lines..really excellent and imagery I loved.


  • Hikari Lady
    June 21

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    fantastic and lovely. Loved how you devided this and how it's not obvious in meaning, gives the reader a chance to provok it as he/she feels fits his feelings. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    ~Noor

  • The whole piece is wonderful. Love the title. Such an amazing read.