by Gregg Rowe
fantastically
autumn-(foliages)
lusciously libidinous
white icicles naked
tediously
evaporating rapidly
soft peonies rising
inconspicuously,
naturally growing
someone's umbrella
mercifully maneuvered
escaping raindrops
Author notes
Haiku Acrostics
Written February 15th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Spring Time Fun by ImJustALostMemory.
500 points, ended April 24, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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First of all I didn't see the word spring *not a real biggie though*. I did think this was a grear write though. An interesting way of writing. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
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JiGgLeZ -
Bravo and Take a bow!!!
This was such a beautiful write!! I loved the flow, imagery and your picture..Everything blended well...I could smell autumn, feel the chill and sense the rain..Oh thank you for the great read!!
~Isis -
Amazingly simply yet intertwined with....beauty and elegance ( thats my attempt at sounding intelligent)
Rosita -
These are beautiful! I love the simplicity and elegance that each one possesses. They are short, yet they seem to wrap each season up with eloquence. Thank you so much for you entry and I wish you the best of luck!
~Liadan
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I think the form you chose to describe the seasons is appropriate, and the content very original.
Thank you for entering the contest. cake -
sweet
i like you peom -
This is truly amazing. I found that you were able to capture the 'feeling' of each season so very perfectly. I am impressed with your skill and your words that you used. I especially loved the lines:
"tediously
evaporating rapidly"
Just a powerful contridiction that is so very beautifully written. I will have to read some more of your works. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. -
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i liked it, it is really enjoyable. it gives me mental pictures of the seasons. keep up the good work. -
I like this. Its very different. Great job! good luck in the contest.
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i love the picture but i hate this poem.... there are words i don't even know and well thats not fun i couldn't pronounce some of them so i just thought it was boring there was no melody no flow no nothing and if i knew what the words actually meant i might be obliged to like it a little more but thats highly doubtful im not sure i even know what the poem was about.... but i wish not to be enlightened
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I dont usually like haikus, but this is an exception. Thanks for entering
~Alex~ -
Wow, awesome job here. I love the way the seaons blended together. IT was more like a "year" than "Four seasons" you know? The acrostics was cool... you didn't have quite enough lines to make me notice right away, but it was a fun effect. It was the alliteration I noticed, that was fabulous. So all in all, great piece here! Thanks for entering!
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I love this one it was truely grand I think that you did this poem so very well indeed. I really inenjoyed this poem of your5 thank you for shareing it
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Excellent!
Yay I really liked these haikus, particularly the end one (I also like the picture very much ) Excellent imagery. Great stuff!
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I have never been able to write in this form. I think it is very interesting though. I liked this poem mainly for it's very visual effects. The flow is real nice. keep it up!
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I liked this piece. It was a great reflection of the seasons (although I must admit I found "naturally growing" to be slightly redundant.) I agree with Susan, I liked the last stanza best. Nice job. Good luck in the contest
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Susan: Don't feel bad, I forgot that i entered this and then tried to delete it after and it didn,t work, so I am just glad that you got a chance to read them and experience the haiku as an acrostic. Gregg I'm not disappointed I was DQ'ed, the amount of medication I am on sometimes I jsut speed read and then regret it after but don't worry about it. Gregg
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I'm sorry but you are not under the age of 13... and being young at heart doesn't count
They are wonderful though....very creative too. I didn't notice the acrostic at first, but that is a neat idea! I especially loved the last last one, very visual. (Especially since it's been raining nonstop here!)
Wonderful job, I'm feel so bad to dq this.
Thank you though, a pleasure to read!
Peace and love
Susan
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Great it was beautifully done.Described the seasons so well and great.
Much love
Mandi -
Just beautiful.
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Hey, I like these haiku. Very nice twist to be acrostic as well - and also to be good haiku which is difficult enough on it's own. Great!
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wow you did a great job on these. certainly took the time and have seemingly perfected the art. I love it. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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The Haiku is a hard enough form to accomplish, but to add the demands of an acrostic to the load...wow. I have to give you pats on the back for even trying it...let alone pulling it off successfully. I can imagine the hard work it took to accomplish this feat. You took each of the four seasons and put them neatly into this series of acrostic haikus so that each one summarized the season designated in its acrostic message. Do you know how brilliant that is? And you used the things that we most associate with those seasons to describe them shortly and aptly for a Haiku...the leaves of Fall...the icicles for Winter...the flowers for Spring...and would that be the Big Guy's umbrella, spread graciously to protect us from the rain so that we may bask in the permitted sun? Wonderful! The imagery was great! I can only say that I am impressed...and, as someone who has never really been too fond of Haikus, that's really saying something. I wish you good luck in this contest. Thanks for sharing! Elaina
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This was beautiful. Hey, I love the pic. I think that I got how to write Haikus, and thanks for pointing out the perfect example that I have already written. goes off to read more of your work So, I am bored..shoot me.
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Four Seasons Haikus
I love playing with words (almongst other things, but we will leave those for poetry topics) and haikus and tankas are just two of my favorites -- especially to get every word to mean something juxtaposed side by side, there is no space for an unwanted words (matter-of-fact I have opened an adoption agency for Unwanted Words in Haikus -- but that is another story) anyways just wanted to thank you for your comment and say I appreciate it very much
Edited on Mar 30, 11:25 because 'spelling (as usual), why don't they put the spell check up here for messages also'. -
Oh i love haikus, so difficult to write and so simple at the same time... i dont think there is any other way to make so few words mean so much, i could spend hours... the 'icicles' haiku read the best i think
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Me I am not into haikus myself I have trouble following rules but I love to read them. I love the seasons especialy winter. I love how you worded it and I think its wonderful. the wording I mean.
This would make a beatiful song. Lol just my luck I take after my dad my mom says . His musical talent at least every poem I see I make into a song. lol
Haley -
i like the acrostic feel in this piece...and the great imagery...thanks for your comment...good write...keep writing...
"Am I Your Anything?"
*Aarica* -
clever cut of the pencil to make a stroke or two of genius laid out in rigid form that flows beautifully....nicely done..Artis
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I do love haikus, have yet to master the slippery lil fellows myself though. You've done a great job of keeping them in line here, very clever use of acrostics as well. Now you are just showing off
Thank you for you kind comments on 'One Night Stand' which are greatly appreciated And yes Burns response was wonderful.
Kat
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