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Mocking Bird

You stand there
looking at me through mirrored eyes
squirming in my dress
smudging my makeup down your face
laughing at me (and crying for you)
What makes you steal my soul?
My false nails?
My sanity?
My flesh crawls to know
you were watching last night
as serenely I danced and talked
unaware of your closing web
that blackness in your grin
the menace in your walk
the knives in your voice (covered with my accent)
what can I give or say to have you leave me be?
leave me alone?
leave me intact?
leave your inexistence?
Go back to your life
sad counterfeit


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  • cazzy71
    June 20

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    You won gold

    After re reading all entries several times,I choose you as gold winner.Due to format,uniqueness,flow,just every thing about this piece was fantastic.Please take a look at my other contest,about regrets,it has some astonishing writes in it,and all entries are more than worthy of viewing. Once again,cheers for entering such an awesome piece.


    • lianonsidhe silver member
      June 20
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      Wow! Thank you so much for the lovely gold cup! Your contest was great, as it had a unique twist on a dark but provocative subject. I will treasure the cup. Thank you again. Lianonsidhe


  • Veronica-Armijo
    June 9
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    It's a great poem good luck.


    • lianonsidhe silver member
      June 20
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      So very glad you liked this one. It's a dark but fascinating subject.
      Lianonsidhe


    • cazzy71
      June 20
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      mocking bird

      This poem is so powerful. I have received so many wonderful entries in this contest.It closes in around 6 hours and picking my favorite three is going to be so difficult.You commented that it was great,and I almost certainly will be placing it amongst top positions.

    • lianonsidhe silver member
      June 9
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      Thank you for your lovely coments and wishes. I am pleased you like it.


  • cazzy71
    June 7
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    Perfection in verse

    This piece is perfection in the highest form.I am amazed at many of the entries already recieved,but this is incredibly poignant,relevant and superb.Sad couterfeit as the ending reinforced the message. Thankyou.


    • lianonsidhe silver member
      June 9
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      So very glad you liked this one. Jealousy is a vile shadow that preys on the innocent. Great contest. Thank you for your lovely comments.


      • cazzy71
        June 9
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        thankyou for your comment

        Thank you for replying,my comments were honest and true.You write so amazingly.God bless you,and all those dear to you.

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