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You And Me

Loving
never easy.
A rollercoaster ride
of mixed emotions for you dear.
And in the end we said goodbye forever,
but I still remember the days,
bittersweet memories,
of you and me,
loving.

Author notes

Hugs are awesome

option number 3. Love

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  • Ted E Bare gold member
    June 22

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    I always said to know true love, you will go through pain. I can tell you have experienced pain frist hand. I hope in your case as in mine, that you will always be fond of those good times you did have and learn from the experience to take with you to the next relationship. I know I have learned so much I'm still taking notes. I want to thank you for your entry into the following contest: "Already On My Favorites."

    Ted E

    PS: Your entry has been blessed by the three wise clappers, but don't spend the whole nine points in one place(lol)!


  • YoursTrulyJulie gold member
    June 8

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    I agree with "HugsForEveryone". Your syllable count is out in line line 2, you have 5 instead of 4 and line 5 has 11 syllables instead of 10.
    I am sure with a little bit of work you could fix this. It is a great write and I wish you all the best in the contest with it

  • musiccraze2009
    June 7
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    I loved this poem! you did a great job! Best of luck in the contest too!


  • HugsForEveryone
    June 7

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    Wow! I LOVED this! It truly was a pleasure to read. I loved how you explained some sort of love story. It seemed a sad but heartfelt story. Every now and then, while I was counting the syllables, they were a little off, but it was not a big problem. I loved this, thank you for reading the rules and entering our contest!
    Good luck!
    ~Kera


  • Coloured Skies
    June 7

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    Awwwwh!
    I loved this one
    the ending made the poem so much better, I really enjoyed it. But one thing..would you plase be able to stick the option number in your authors notes thanks! Good luck.

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