dear boy;;
i gaze profoundly into the overcast shady blue eyes of yours. whenever i peer into those abstruse eyes; i can sense a storm glowering over us as if you could snap in two like a branch struck down by a mighty stroke of lightning.
'i love you.' i cautiously say.
those eyes stare me down as a target for a shot. if i would've poised myself on that cliff of unsteadiness; as i am now; those eyes just follow me back and forth. your hands never moved to blend into mine, nor to run through my hair as the wind. you just stare and i can't read the book they're trying to lay out.
'i love you'. i'm now more urgent in my tone, i'm sure you can perceive that.
&&though the world doesn't accept nor comprehend why i do; they don't see past the lifeless body like i do. or i think i do.
i want a response and quick. need is bubbling inside my body; and my heart cavorts around. i don't care how you say it; there's too many ways to count.
'Ana Behibek'
'Mala tujhashi prem aahe.'
'Vos amo'
'S' Agapo'
'je t'aime.'
'i love you.'
i had forgotten the only language you knew was silence.
'i love you; i think.' i cry.
' i love you, too.' you whispered.
ironic, as much as i ached to hear that, i believed it was false. i know when i said it, i only wanted the best for you. i wanted to watch you grow and flourish inside the wildest dreams of yours. i wanted to see you achieve greater things than ever imagineable. i only want the capital achievements for you.
i love you more than just for my own heart.
and when you bluntly state that you love me the same,
i wonder. do you want the best for me, if that means to be seperate? do you want me to achieve the best, or do you love me for your own heart?
my muse is rubbish as i think all these things and stare into stormy eyes.
then you softly touched my hand with yours and your lips slanted upward in that sly smart grin of yours. sometimes i wonder if you're not the son of Posiedon. your eyes and unkempt blonde and white hair. you're utterfly gorgeous. there's no doubt about it. do you think the same of me?
you then squeezed my hand and snaked your fingers up and through my own.
'i love you.' you stated.
and then leaned in...
now i've realized our feelings mirror each other. you want the best for i. i want the best for you.
at this moment, the best for us is simply;;
being together.
Love,
Girl.
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"Ragdoll"
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indeeed, very powerful, I <3 the french
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'Ana Behibek'
'Mala tujhashi prem aahe.'
'Vos amo'
'S' Agapo'
'je t'aime.'
'i love you.'
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I love this!
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i had forgotten the only language you knew was silence.
I loved that.
This is gorgeous.
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thank you. (:
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Simply beautiful.
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thank you! (:
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t made me almost cry
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haha oh i'm sorry!
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Wow! Amazing stream of consciousness... you do well examining the innermost thoughts of this character.
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WOW!! YAY! THANK YOU!!!! This was so pretty!
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you're welcome! (:
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Yess (:
This is beautiful. I love your imagery and the innocence in this piece. Very inspiring and hopeful. (:
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Your welcome for entering. (;
Thanks for commenting, haha!
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I truly enjoyed this piece. Such innocence in these words.
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thank you thank you. (:
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'i had forgotten the only language you knew was silence."
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thank you. (:
so many people have stated that also.
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ohmygoodness how talented you truly are. this poem hit so close to home i could hear a doorbell ring. you did an fantastic job setting up the story allowing us to be close to the characters all though we know little about them or their love. also the line i had forgotten the only language you knew was silence. was fantastic just that bite those words had was fantastic
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sheesh, you make me sound like some amazing poet or something. (:
thank you thank you thank you. (: glad for ringing your doorbell. (:
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ahhh, seriously?! (: woohoo!
thank you!
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great narrative. It captured me from the beginning and held me there. Nice job.
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glad it did. (: glad you could enjoy it. (: thank you!
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'Ana Behibek'
'Mala tujhashi prem aahe.'
'Vos amo'
'S' Agapo'
'je t'aime.'
'i love you.'----> thats amazing. i love that. the intensity of that is great.
this was great.
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thank youuuu! (:
and all those ways of saying i love you are legit.
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Really evocative
This is a great piece...its really honest and touching.
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awuh - this is just so gorgeous!
I love everything about this - it's bittersweet, in a way.
I like the struggle and weighing on how much those three words are supposed to mean. too many people throw those words around. :/
beautiful, lovely. (:
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you just seriously made my night. (: thank you soooo much.
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yay!
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