Oh, how I wish to be perfect like you
Born from the bottom of the sea
From your skeletal lacking mother
And in such purity, hard to fake
Yet easy to mistake.
And oh, how I wish I could be beautiful like you
With your undulating red lips
And your thin, skinny hips
And with just enough bite to make you in demand
And for all the mothers to love you, and all the fathers to want you.
Oh how lucky, those girlfriends are, when they receive you.
And together, oh joy, there's nothing more
Than the clearness of the sky, so true, untainted, are you.
And I am nothing, nothing compared to you.
On a bed of blue silk, white purity and red beauty-
How ever you do represent!
Author notes
I chose the concept for Junes birth flower and birth stone. Hope you like ^^
A contest entry
- June New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended July 6, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Rather lovely. I could see how you took that from the picture. Good luck.
Etheren Foryst
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The comparisons in this are nice. You have made a picture of something pure and beautiful. My only dislike is the way over usage of the word and, especially for the beginnng of so many lines.
Welcome to AP and good luck in the contest.
Storm
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Welcome to Allpoetry
I love your pearl description and your comparisons.
Nicely penned.
Blue silk - sounds lovely.
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Very nice write for June's symbols. Thank you.
♥
Shawna
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I really like your wording in this piece, you have a fantastic opening stanza. Welcome to the site, thanks for entering and good luck with this piece in the contest.
Laura,
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Oooo, nice take on a prompt in this contest, didnt quite know it coule go this way!
Lovely piece!
Welcome to the site!
I hope you enjoy your stay with us and keep penning!
Regards
Sophie
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welcome to allpoetry
Your first stanza is my favorite.
I like how you put this together. Bringing the two together in the last stanza. Nicely done.
Good luck to you in the contest and keep writing.
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WE Love this!!!!
Very interesting!! And this is a real honor..
Actually, if there was a picture here with a strand of pearls and a red rose on blue silk.. it wouldnt have been soo nicely visualised.. Your wordings seemed soo powerful!! Very well explained and your words were full of life..
It brought the picture live!!
A wonderful tribute!!
Thanks..
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Ohhhhhhh. So unique. I love it. It has so much
to offer the reader, giving homage and explanation
to readers.
A little tweaking on the form is all I would suggest.
Thank you. Warmly, CookieZeal/Site Greeter
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