Raining down with admiration,
Hard to have a conversation,
Visibly with another self,
A troubled girl screaming help,
Do we stay and save the day?
Or let i go and run away?
Pressures running high on 'love'
Somehow she see's me above,
The rest, the best, those i detest,
Still i dont feel that this is blessed,
Cast a light, a shadow will follow,
Cut something open, it'll end hollow,
Anguished entrapment, inside my own skin,
Want to help, dont know where to begin,
How can i help, her and myself?
My head is so scattered i feel like head elf,
Im stuck in a spiral and i have to get out,
Im running out of room for even self doubt,
Just gotta stop this, its getting to much,
Feel so enclosed that im struggling to breathe,
I think its best that its time that you leave!
A contest entry
- Jealousy has a capital J by cazzy71.
415 points, ended June 20, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Bronze for you
After careful deliberation I have awarded you bronze.The entries I had were all so engaging,so moving,so touching,it was truly difficult to get awards.However I got there in the end,and have now gave bronze to you. Thankyou.Please do take time to read the entries in my other current contest,its about regret and ends on 26th June,within it you will find some absolutely astonishing wordy creations. -
Hm, the feeling you put forth into this is the same as i'd have, and the way you express it is alike me to, but it is your style that i like, great piece!:]
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wow!
Anguished entrapment,fantastic choice of words.Truly magnificent!
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