to try and gauge that
vertical horizon
is difficult
and troublesome
for old eyes
requiring technically:
perfect flight
trick of the light
gentlest might
(with a pen)
from the man
in the sky
trying to coast
on thermals
with ruffled plumage
a stone in my craw
i find hymns
a comfort
For Ben
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Intriguing write. Certainly open to interpretation. I don't know why but those last two lines feel like the combination of resignation and complacency mixed together. Well done.
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Don't be discouraged. Young 20/20 eyes would probably look straight at the horizon and not even notice the problem. One of the problems is that old eyes are striving for perfection where the young are content with moving on quickly.
Don't know how relevant the comment is to the poem but it's what springs to mind.
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Vic - your comments are always relevant to me! Sorry I am getting behind with The Tractor - had a lot on - will message you on facebook (arsebook?!) - anyway, this was about feather man, if you remember.... x love deb x
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oh but, Victor... the stone in the craw is awfully hard to swallow.... Yep... stupid.... sorry that the London picnic never happened. Best I expect!! Poets reading their liver and lights in Regents Park would not be clever nor pretty!! An un-Edna-fying site.... (miss spelling, miss behaving!!) xx best love xx Debs
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More Please
Don't get it............yet, but it's so good I'm happy to read it over and over. The last verse is 12/10.
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Thanks for taking the time GR.
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float on, then, I say
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why not? will i take that to be a blessing?
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