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they dug into her flesh
until their nails were red
with unwanted life. she
would have cried, but the
tendons in her hands were
writhing under the skin
and she was scared they
could hear her. instead,
she stared at the ball of
light above and heard god
laughing at her blindness
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Author notes
prompt: sleeping sun by nightwish
68/100
A contest entry
- Reserve An Option!!! by Rashida.
1750 points, ended June 24, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is a draft - be as harsh as you like.
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So strong and meaningful. Intense wording.
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this poem was really good. i could see everything that was happening in my head, nice imagery. could feel the shame in this woman. very well done.
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Imagery in this is astounding! I'm so curious though as to what happens. I mean obviously the light would forshadow death, but God's laughter might imply ignorance or a fate worse than death?
Great write!
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Hey, thank you for the comment
this is actually a poem about a woman having an abortion and wanting to hide from the light because she feels ashamed - so I think you hit it there with fate worse than death I'm glad you liked it!
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Ohh wow... I can totally see the picture in my head... what a terrific piece!
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Okay, two options, pick one or combine the two...
If you pick the song you can base it off the lyrics, the song title, or the video.
A Title
Bleak As Tommorrow's Winter
A Song
Video
http://www.youtube.com/results?search_type=&search_query=nightwish&aq=f
Lyrics
http://www.sing365.com/music/lyric.nsf/Sleeping-Sun-lyrics-Nightwish/D1A430B4063FB64348256BB5000E5C85
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