the ocean is my lover
i taste the salt of his water
i lay naked on the sand
and run over it with my hand
i bury myself in and under
and hear your moan in your wave's thunder
you soak me divinely to the bone
in your waters i am clothed
i submerse myself in you
i see you blush a deeper blue
your sand is hot on my flesh
touching it makes me sweat
over my body your waves gently roll
you consume me body and soul
i watch your surface tremble with pleasure
my ecstasy cannot be measured
i sigh in pleasure as i swim
my lover the ocean i am his
i can't wait to go to the beach in july
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Nice poetic language and nice interplay with the ocean, I feel you giving yourself over to this lover who you adore,enjoyed keep stepping
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Sensually Splendid!
I love how you maintained the tone of erotica in this poem... It neither is subliminal nor is overtly expressed.
Most of the couplets here are really brilliant in texture and content. However I feel the occasional breaks in rhyming are little disappointing in context to the overall tone of the poem. Other than that, the poem is really fantabulous.
Here is my offering:
You soak me divinely to the bone,
"in your waters I can forever atone."
I submerse myself in you,
"as" you blush a deeper "hue".
Your sand is hot on my "skin",
"touching it makes me wet within"
Over my body your waves gently roll,
you consume me, "my" body and soul;
I watch your surface tremble with pleasure
my "restless" ecstasy, "a desperate measure"
I sigh as "I dive inside you"
my lover, my ocean... "To give his due."
M.
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YOUR BOYFRIENDS FAT ?? D:
lol [=
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