I just want to fall asleep in your arms,
to feel secure once more or to have a blissful moment
to forget it all this is I ask
We are separated by the line called the living and the dead.
You on one side and me on the other.
A line that can't be crossed or rubbed out.
Stuck we stand on either side
both wishing we could cross,
but sadly we can not.
As time goes on our love grows stronger,
but its power is making us crumble
our souls and minds
Tristan and Isolde once said
"You were right. I don't know if life is
greater than death.But love is more then
either."
Author notes
Please critisie, carefully and thoughtfully, thank love Yorkshire Rose
Comments
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will always be a fan, abstract poem would love to discuss sometime. Will love not bring them together in time so why doomed love ?
sorry Verity its difficult to comment on your work as it is difficult to know what your context is when you wright,as i'm not too familier with this place but you know what you want to say and how can you analise with out the authers context? -
u have failed to read the rules of my contest, or even the prompt. So plz dont be surprised when I do this.......
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A different story, tragic from the very beginning with a small determined light of hope at the end.
As time goes on our love grows stronger,
but its power is making us crumble
our souls and minds
So true, love does this to people all the time
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Not bad at all, a 'teenage' poem with a quiet quality.
Regards.
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