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Fake Me A Better Love

One of my greatest lovers
that surrounds me with so much
love and care
so much it worships me
that I hesitate to speak
unkindly of it

Insecurity
Fear---another
Doubt---another one

Of course they aren't real lovers

This is the life I am swimming in
I have my crushes of course
the ones I would rather be with;
they are quite out of my league
I look upon them with
admiration

Perfection
Confidence---another
Joy---another

Of course they aren't real crushes

Being the type of person I am
committed to my relationships,
that is,
I find it very hard to
cheat
on my lovers

Of course they are fake

So I could fake me a better love
Till eventually
maybe my crushes would want me
I don't know I have tried
and failed before
Perhaps if I faked my way through it
eventually I would become used to it
and it would be
real love

A contest entry

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  • PaintedParisPassion
    August 26

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    Of course they aren't real crushes

    Being the type of person I am
    committed to my relationships,
    that is,
    I find it very hard to
    cheat
    on my lovers

    Of course they are fake

    So I could fake me a better love
    Till eventually
    maybe my crushes would want me
    I don't know I have tried
    and failed before


    It was a little confusing at times, but it was still a great read. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    ♥


  • Kathraina silver member
    July 28

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    This is a good piece of fair quality.
    I think that the concept is rather cliche, but of course a poet can always take the cliche and make it unique. To me this just comes off as something someone would scribble in their diary before bed. I do see potential with this piece though.
    Bravo


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    July 25

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    I like the idea here, but as I already said to another poet in this competition, this is merely the tip of the iceberg. I'd love to see you expand on this idea, really dig deep into the darkest recesses of humanity, and make your reader salivate.

    Thank you for entering.


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    July 22

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    62 for Write
    16 for title
    Great Write.

    nicely penned, wish you luck
    anyway
    thanks for entering

    Out of 100 You have Achieved 78

    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 16

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    this is a good poem, thank you for entering

    ps, faking is very hard work with so little reward


  • Ami
    July 13

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    Wow this was amazing and I loved the title
    Gratz on the h.m that you have so far and
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck
    -♥Amy♥


  • Rashida
    June 6

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    I love the interesting way you broke up the lines in your piece, it makes the read more interesting.

  • SapereAude11
    June 6

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    Nice! This poem is interesting in that you're both direct and subtle at the same time in many ways. It is very easy to convince ourselves of something and try to have it become reality, but life always bites us in the ass eventually.

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