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[ I feel the hate ]

I feel the hate
I see the pain
Yet I am a hopeless bystander
Forced just to watch
To learn
To see what I almost became

I am reminded of love
Even when I see all this hate
I think of how I don't want to be
And how I want to treat her
To love
To be calm and hold her at night

I think I may just be acting stupid
Hoping for something
That will never be
A simple love
Of someone
That don't feel the same

This vicious triangle
Of stupidity, hate, and love
It takes me over
One connected to another
I'm trapped
And don't know what to do

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  • I think that you can expand on this a lot more... I feel this is unfinished... Idk why, but these poems you have written I feel like that... IDK what to do help me hunny!!!
    ~Alix Maria