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A tender affair saturates profound moments with subtle grace and easy sighs,

her smooth laughter is a swirl of colour in folds of dark romance,

dance steps capture quiet moments with fine beauty,

roses are fragrant, they deliver her homeland's southern wide glance,

she's a wild bloom in a spectacular garden forever stretching fast brown eyes,

a ward of calm destiny, her wonder is free.

 

Berry sensations glide

across buds which taste soft motion,

inside the heart a rhythm tattoos fantastic desire.

 

Inspired, I walk spirituality's summer sunshine while delicacy cries,

characteristics of two souls blend into love's sweet golden chance,

enhanced, her name's a saint; child's light, pearl jewellery,

a twin moon sister sparkles, sends art into a fabulous trance,

in life's complicated eccentricity she's a cool affectionate surprise,

sail along woman's individuality.

 

Seas of her meet my tide

as I collect a stray notion,

and with futuristic shapes there are flames; our perfect fire.

 

Entire galaxies twirl their brilliance with simplicity's hot luscious fast-paced moods,

rescued, by the fingers of complexity I slip between space and I am wooed.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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A double Individualtean.
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  • Net
    1 day ago
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    beautiful


  • Rameen Arif
    November 23
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    A great poem


  • Kiran silver member
    November 22
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    Your amazing use of imagery always astounds me! This was fantastic. I loved reading this piece; vivid and wonderful!


  • nurselulu
    November 22
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    Very beautiful poem.........I really love this!
    "Entire galaxies twirl their brilliance with simplicity's hot luscious fast-paced moods,
    rescued, by the fingers of complexity I slip between space and I am wooed." I really like the ending...It completes it so well. I feel like the poem as a whole has a dream like quality to it......it is very fluid like. I like the way it flows down the page like silk. I really think you are very talented! Thank you for sharing...
    Cheers!


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 22
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    another sigh

    loving to loose myself in your words,

    she's a wild bloom in a spectacular garden forever stretching fast brown eyes,
    a ward of calm destiny, her wonder is free.

    a stellar image!


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    November 22
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    excellent

    Very sensual indeed
    I am still reveling in reading the words in the poem
    Penned perfectly
    Hugs
    Susan~~~

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    November 15

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    Enchanting.

    Dancing linguistically the Poet sows the seeds of romance, allows them to flourish, bloom and blossom.

    Not only is your phraseology unique but the form is one that you created
    and shows not only are you able to write to every form created by other poets
    but that you have the skill to form your own.


    Kudos


    Sadly the system will not allow another standing ovation
    as I've applauded before, but it's worthy of it.


  • Aribeth
    November 14
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    Lovely.

    I like who all the verses are different to one another. It really does take you on a journey


  • arafura gold member
    November 14

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    A wonderful love poem. But who is it who is infatuated with whom? Does the fair lady take second place to the poet's love of himself and his own words? Well written but just a bit too egocentric and self serving for my tastes. But I encourage you to keep writing, you show potential.


  • Ani Grace
    November 14
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    Sensual and scintillating...makes the reader wanna inhale the scents and taste the atmosphere here.


  • GuiltedShadow gold member
    November 14

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    I was reading the comments below and all I can say is...wtf? I wonder sometimes if people who call themself poets even know poetry. Do they not realize that you can say the sky is blue, yet what holds the sun is red, and it doesn't matter if it makes sense? It's the way the reader feels when reading that makes it poetry, and if one can't relate or even feel that which is meant to be felt from the writer, perhaps they should stick to nursery rhymes. Oh but wait... a cow can't really jump over a moon can she? Wonder if they crticized that. Sorry, rambling. I thought this was quite sensual and hot, but then again, what do I know. I'm only a poet. Keep writing my dear friend.


  • John BoSox
    November 13
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    Love this, hon..One of your bests so sweet..tender..like perfume on my soul..You are so talented, sweety..keep writing..I love it


  • Kevin Moderators member
    November 12

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    for some reason i thought 'they deliver her homeland's southern wide glance,' was wordy and long. It's a beautiful phrase, but pehraps needs two lines or something. I'm a bit confused about who 'they' are, and who 'she' is.

    It needs a period around there, the commas are making me feel out of breath

    summer sunshine - then newline I think.

    'delicacy cries' - a delicacy can't cry, what is really crying here?

    a beautiful and powerful piece!


  • Kazunan
    November 3
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    Great piece. All the best. Keep the writing.

  • Feathered Motion
    November 1
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    oh, and thanks for sharing

  • Feathered Motion
    November 1
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    good luck in the contest


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    October 30

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    "Poetry Heaven," indeed. Uuummm, uuummm, uuummm...if poetry were chocolate, this would be rich, smooth, dark chocolate. Simply luscious. Your work, chase, takes me into another dimension. There are so many beautiful lines throughout this masterpiece, but one that I like especially is "...a swirl of colour in folds of dark romance." Yep; luscious.

  • chrisb65
    October 30
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    like it.

    love the language. 


  • fiona8 silver member
    October 30
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    You've got some great lines in this:
    stretching fast brown eyes
    Seas of her meet my tide
    to name a couple,
    enjoyable read


  • Melee Vau gold member
    October 30
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    I really like your imagery, fav bit "two souls blend into love's sweet golden chance," that's poetry alright!


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    October 30
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    Damn man, what can I tell ya that hasn't already been said, as always a lil ripper from a masters pen...BRAVO!!!
    Ticks all the boxes


  • ShaShay
    October 30

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    Well Ian, you've done it again. Wonderful read. You find the most interesting ways of stating the most complex emotions. I enjoyed this read as I do all of your works. Take time to stop by more often.
    Sharon


  • spideracer gold member
    October 30

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    Not sure what's up with Feathered Motion below, anyway this is another of yours to write home about. It just amazes me how you keep on coming up with such poetry, with once again imagery to hold ones mind spellbound.


  • dragonfly89
    October 30
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    Lovely

    It simply pulled me in and made me want to keep reading.

  • godkisslucifer
    October 29
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    I am sorry that feel as though I dismissed this as a poem. I have not. I am, in no way, attacking you or your work. I didn't come here to kiss ass and give smiley faces either. I came here to give positive opinions on posted poetry and receive the same (even negative). If you know yourself, as a writer/poet, maybe you should post your poems that only selectively involve the few that "get it" and dispose of the rest that "don't get it". You've been here awhile. 2005? Your skin should be thicker than an oak tree! Oh, and by the way my friend.... you may smile on my poetry. You may laugh. You can do whatever it is you wish. For example, you could attack me personally and assume my skill from a single post. I hope this clears any confusion. If not, countine to allow outside forces to spit on you, causing implusive reactions. Happy trails.

             &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;         &nb sp;               GLK

  • Feathered Motion
    October 29
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    it's mad that people see a poem and decide it is not a poem hehehe goodbye allpoetry. you won't hear from me again.

  • LaptopPi
    October 26

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    An excellent piece!

    • Feathered Motion
      October 29
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      what do you mean - This is the opposite of my poems - I write poems that are very structured, almost always rhyming - are you blind? this is a formed rhyming poem!

  • godkisslucifer
    October 28

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    Hi! I'm new here.. this is my first comment (or anything!),so... lucky you! Lucky me! Ok... here we go....

    Your passion in this piece is electric. Its overall message is clear and present: The switch and transformation of emotion; this being unexplianable love. But I feel your attempt to explain this "mood" is too colourful. Every line screams with creativity, but, like twisting the "wet cloth" of expression with TOO much effort, its artistic understanding may leave the reader with a dry confusion. May I also point out that there is an abundance of contradictions? Nothing wrong with contradictions in poetry.. but in lines 16 & 17 ("Seas of her meet my tide as I collect a stray notion,"), I feel a purposeful push in your word placement to attempt a intended connection to the reader, only to lose them in overlaping its link. You are a VERY talented writer. Your vocab is choice and extended (AWESOME!). My only nack with this is placement... other than that, this is poetic beauty! Raw emotional movement. I truely enjoyed this piece... Got anymore? Send 'em my way! You have my attention. "Wow" me! (I know you will)



    Thanks,
    GKL

    • Feathered Motion
      October 29
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      how can one be doing it too much? get a grip mate - don't go into detail in your crit cos i will look at your poetry and smile. there a million critics and no poets left. contradcitions - look at thet first poem you posted before wailing to me how good/bad i am i hate this site. i am so glad i am banned right now lol and when i come come, i will leave! how's that for contradiction? all people want to do here is attack.

  • Feathered Motion
    October 29
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    Ha

  • Feathered Motion
    October 29

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    it's like people are blind when they read this poem, it is a form poem, it rhymes! yes it has adjectives, but not everyone looks at poetry as less is more! open your eyes people, i am not trying too hard or to hard as horus8 says; the teacher of people, allegedly. and i am tweaking my tweed jacket as i type

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