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My Car's Lazy

i'd like to drive my car someday
but my car is lazy
i gave it a bypass
but it still can't be bothered
it's had new shoes
now one of them is flat
it's a couch potatoe car
no it's a shed scrap metal heap
i really love my car
but i've been seeing others
it just doesn't have what i need in a car
like forward mommentum for example
one day my car might change
join life be in it or something
and then we'll get to drive together
but till then i'll let it sleep

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Written March 16th, 2004

A contest entry

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  • truembrace
    March 21, 2004
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    For some many reasons, this was a pleasure to read - humor and originality don't come upon these pages near enough. This was very creative and an admirable write. After reading items like this I sort of scratch my head and think, "now, why couldn't I come up with something that was different in this sort of creative way?!"

    This one was great. Truly. Best of luck in the contest.


  • leannewales
    March 18, 2004
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    lol..i like the take on this one...i really love my car but i've been seeing others!!...lol...nicely done and very funny...thanks for entering...hugs..leanne xxx

  • mademoiselle
    March 17, 2004
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    i know your car! i know it well the windows dont like to wind up either and the boot never shuts. but you love her coz you get angry when me and cat want to kick her hehehehehehe. i still think you should get a mistress lol


  • Aimee Hill
    March 16, 2004
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    lol!! I know how you're feeling.. my car just got
    done being "lazy" Now that it's awake again,
    I am NEVER gonna let it snooze!!! mwahhahaha!
    Enjoyed this write...it gave me some giggles when I really
    needed them. Thanks!
    Best of luck to you, in the contest!

    ~Aimee

  • poltroon
    March 16, 2004
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    i actually laughed out loud at this (i really hate the concept of typing lol, especially because you know the person really isn't laughing, but i did)! i've gone through so much nonsense with cars in the past year i don't even want to think about it!
    the last car i owned was cursed, or it hated me, i think it tried to murder me on several occasions. i eventually ditched it with a flat tire and it was toed to car heaven (or hell in my case). at any rate i like this little ditty, it yanks my funny bone. huzzah

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