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The Journey Home

Life has many anticipations.
Life is full of revelations.
An amazing feeling I'll adore
Is flying among the constellations.

This trip is long awaited for.
I'll cross the sea and see the shore.
It's full of life that never dies,
But lives with Him forevermore.

This world is filled with many lies
And whos and whens and wheres and whys.
I eagerly approach the day
When I can rest amidst the skies.

But I must work and watch and pray.
There're things to do and show and say
Out of love for Him along the way,
Out of love for Him along the way.

Author notes

I wrote this poem for Junior English class this past school year. We get to Heaven not by anything that we do, but through God's unlimited grace alone. Since God loves us and has promised to bring all believers to be with Him in Heaven for eternity, we want to thank and praise Him through our actions in this life as we eagerly await that day.


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  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    August 13

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    HOODWINKED!

    This is a beautiful poem of expectation and anticipation to live forever with the God of mercy and grace. I like this expression of faith and confidence in the Word of God and standing on His precious promises. Well done!

    You have been Hoodwinked today by the Poetic Bandits because WE CARE!

    Dennis


  • Midnite-Rae
    July 31

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    "This trip is long awaited for.
    I'll cross the sea and see the shore.
    It's full of life that never dies,
    But lives with Him forevermore.

    This world is filled with many lies
    And whos and whens and wheres and whys." I really liked that part. It was my favorite. God blesses us everyday whether we see it or not. I do believe that God's grace helps us get to Heaven, however, I do think how we act helps us as well. But even if we are a good person that does the right thing and helps people, or if we aren't, God has the final decision. I really enjoyed your poem. You did a wonderful job. Thanks for entering and Good luck in my contest.


  • ajocean silver member
    July 21
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    fantastic i love this million claps.


  • NickRhyme silver member
    July 20
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    Nice rhyme scheme and a good poem. Thank you for entering.


  • trekkergirl
    July 14

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    nice. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering this into my contest. I like your views on heaven. Nicely written.


  • Antebellum
    July 10

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    'This trip is long awaited for.
    I'll cross the sea and see the shore.
    It's full of life that never dies,
    But lives with Him forevermore.'


    I really like this stanza.
    thanks for taking the time to enter, good luck.


  • Heva Feva
    July 3

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    "This trip is long awaited for.
    I'll cross the sea and see the shore.
    It's full of life that never dies,
    But lives with Him forevermore.”

    These are my favourite lines! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
    -heva ♫


  • aeolia
    June 16

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    Penguins?

    "This trip is long awaited for" -- you shouldn't end sentences in prepositions... just a little English student nitpick. If you want to change it, there are a few ways you could revise this. You might want to change "trip," or at least imply more of that lovely afterlife stuff; maybe "When God returns, my soul will soar / I'll cross the sea and see the shore" is a decent option, and then you've got that more of that alliteration in there without it being overbearing.

    "I eagerly approach the day" -- "approach" doesn't quite seem to fit. Perhaps "await" would work; you used that in a previous line, but if you change that, "await" would definitely fit.

    Anyway, in a more general sense, the flow of the poem is very good. I'm not the best person at metre, but it seemed a little off in the last two lines and the whole first stanza. The rest was much more fluid. You might want to have another look there. But overall, a sweet, heartfelt write, even if I can't relate to the whole Christianity thing.


  • melphleg gold member
    June 14
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    Nice piece. Flows alright. I think you could loose the first "And" in your sting of "And's in "whos and whens and wheres and whys" and it might flow a little better.
    The piece certainly speaks the truth of grace.


  • daviscth silver member
    June 11

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    This is a beautiful poem and fit in just fine with my contest.I like the way it reads, almost like a song... Thanks for the entry.


  • MichaelSavage gold member
    June 11

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    This sounds lyrical and I know Sam will love it. Nice rhyming and flow to it. Great job and I like your testimony for God. You keep penning as well as you are now.
    Michael


  • PhoenixFaith
    June 11

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    Absolutely beautiful...the rhyming is awesome and the message is just great. And I love the religion aspect of this piece. Gorgeous

    Best of luck and thanks for entering
    Kate


  • Sharon Marie gold member
    June 11

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    Amen

    Incedentley I love your comment about Gods grace What a beautiful thing when grace is revealed to the heart it can only stand in awe of it's Savior I love every word in the journey home and we're always watching always praying unto that hour and day he takes us home .
    Great poem !
    Sharon


  • Budart
    June 8
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    I don't think this poem is reality based. Hardly specific either. I don't get anything new out of this it is just the same old religious cliche reworded one more time. sorry i am DQing this to make room for other poems. Thank you for your efforts. If you have a poem about your personal religious experience please try again.

  • PhoenixFaith
    June 6
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    This is absolutely beautiful. I am glad that you did end up putting it on here. And i am glad that you found a contest for it also. Your rhyming is yet again just gorgeous and flawless. I like the repetition that you used with the last two lines. Very very well written and wonderful job. I love it!!!!!! Keep it up!

    Always write from the heart
    Never give up
    Kate


  • Denerica
    June 5
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    Almost like a song...heartfelt and beautiful, with truth. Blessings.

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