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The Gamer

There was a gamer from Deventer
Who played all night on his computer
War games, sport and animation
He was awed with fascination
Until the voice said "Game Over"

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  • The Poet 2994
    June 7

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    Really good! Nice to read something from someone my own age!
    You could try expanding it and adding extra verses - perhaps more about his/her feelings?
    Thanks!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    June 6
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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    I remember the 'old' days when most games did say "Gamer Over" Thanks for writing this. I enjoyed it much.

    I looked it up and: "Deventer is a municipality and city in the Salland region of the Dutch province of Overijssel." Something like that would be great to put in your Authors Notes. It lets the reader know where you are coming from.

    Best of Wishes

    Mark