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Crystal Clear

~*~

 

Sunshine cast rainbows to each drip
sliding down a profile,
colored pale.

Each one slowing... before pouring
over supple lips,
now naked and bathed ~ trembling
with truths outspoken.

Your soul turned yellow
and you walked away,  letting your flower die.
So perfect~ she was,
like some rare glass.

Only able to avoid the push of your feet
as long as she didn’t ever

truly speak.

 

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Author notes

Prompt:
One Push To Many

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  • Emmyb gold member
    June 16
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    exceedingly good.


  • poorme
    June 6
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    For one dfay I wish I had your magic touch. Very nice Dee!!!
    Miss you!
    Love you!!


  • thepoetssoul
    June 6

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    This is so creative, I love what you have done with this poem.I like that you leave the poem open to inturpritation.The beggining line is really good, wonderfully unique.Thanks for sharing your poetic talent.
    Smile always

    Tony


  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 5

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    Wel, if you don't know where it came from you can blame me!!! I would like to write this powerfully.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    June 5

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    beautiful take on the prompt.

    I love that you have that pen of yours.

    '


  • CrystalLizard
    June 5

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    For some reason, I'm drawn to the line "the push of your feet." It's so soft, and yet so meaningful. I had to read this a couple of times to let the meaning wash over me. The imagery is flawless, and I love the way you've braided emotion into your words. Good luck in the contest!


  • DeJaBlue gold member
    June 5
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    Wow...this is a stunner. So heartwretching and full of gripping emotion.


  • Desire gold member
    June 5

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    Okies...Me balling~ like Baby

    WTFridge~ Hot Momma
    You know I'm am trying to start my day tear free

    This is one Powerful piece~ emotions tug so hard my Heartstrings are like...
    Love the direction You took this prompt!
    Excellent indeed!

    after the storm...

    Thank You for sharing Your Voice
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


    • delightfulmess silver member
      June 5
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      Sorry about the water works. I dont even know where this piece
      came from it just poured to the page.
      Thank you for you wonderfully warm comments Hot Momma
      they always brighten my day.

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