Marius, Marius...
The sweetest, the purest, the lamb
of all loves;
you, the one I love so dearly,
are the one I treated worst.
My Marius...
You've cried with me,
helped me through,
and it is only because of you
that my life has gotten this far.
Oh, ye gods!
How can it be that you are perfection for me,
and I have done such terrible things?
Is this how love reacts to love?
If only, if only
if only I had been better to you.
Your heart would not be in such pain.
My Marius, my love,
I would walk with you into hell itself...
but I am the greatest heartache you've ever known.
I wish I was what you deserve.
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Comments
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Very dramatic and full of elegant lines.
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a very deep and emotional poem. so much feeling put into the words.. i love that last line, really pulls it all together. great job.
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a good dark emotional poem though oh ye gods - it made me think i was living in a time not of now, no one speaks like that anymore so it disturbs me when i see others trying to emulate poets of the past for i think they have no voice of their own
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I absolutely adore lines 4-5 and 14- I can completely relate! Most of the time, you hear about the person on the other end of the stick, so this is a new and appreciated perspective (you can only read about "why did you do this to me????" for so long without going insane.) I liked the last line, especially- a good ending point. I enjoyed the mood you created as well....
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wow, thats so sad.. excellent poem hon!
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