I feel your weight atop me,
Such a sweet feeling.
I feel your breath hot,
Upon my flesh.
Your mouth a sweet caress
Upon my breast.
You hands touching
My soft damp hair.
Mouths open, pressed together
Our tongues entwined.
My legs parting,
You sliding between.
I arch up to meet you,
You thrust home, filling me.
My legs locked
Around your waist.
Passion builds,
Bodies straining
Reaching for release,
The time is now
Sweet fulfillment near,
The dream shatters
Waking to an empty bed,
You are not here, but still...
Wanting you...
Needing you...
how did you like it?
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Hot! Hot! Hot!
I love a wench will give me leave
Her body in my arms to wreathe;
To press her gently, and to kiss;
To sigh, and look with eyes that wish
For what, if I could once obtain,
I would neglect with flat disdain.
I'd give her liberty to toy
And play with me, and count it joy.
Our freedom should be full complete,
And nothing wanting but the feat.
Let's practice, then, and we shall prove
These are the only sweets of love.
Well lady, if he's not there, and you're stll in need. perhaps I might do? ROFLMAO !!!
Actually, all joking aside, good expressions of desire and fantasy seem, in the most part to be completely missing on AP. There is a dearth of good poetry that is both erotic, and sensual, whilst awful, ill thought out rubbish, appears to reign the day. I have read three of your poems so far, and you have a talent for expressing love. Might I suggest that you employ both the tenderness of your love poetry with a touch of the erotic and sensual and bring your talents to bear in this arena. The sort of thing that I am talking about is to encode through metaphor and simile, passion and desire, coupled to the act itself, without actually being so direct as to state what is is that you and your lover are up to... let the reader discover that for themselves. I have offered you an example of what I mean and I would be interested to see how you might encompass the same.
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i liked it a lot specially... well all of it your bed wont be empty tonite ... wanting needing .. so.. mmm...
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Yes, this one fits too I know, I know..... You did an awesome job on this one! I love the pure heartfelt emotion in this one! What a great read this morning!
and love
Nyetta
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