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Bleeding lilac bloom,
variations in rhythm
counterbalance their essence.
Unheard color screams at the sight
of its pointed pistil.
To survive against one's will-
sequesters sanity.
Roots wrap around slow melodies,
Petals faster...
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Author notes
Bleeding Lilac Bloom is the prompt - 34 words.
Hosted by Amaranthine Lover
A contest entry
- Quickie Now #34 by amaranthine lover.
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To survive against one's will-
sequesters sanity.
lol, damn
a.d.d. page, you got worddss
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I am a big fan of Rush and their lyrics will take you places. Read the lyrics to Rush's Entre Nous!
Thanks for reading me!
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great
this was great , yup i loved it . your deffently a great poet like alice said I envy your ability to out so much in little.
well brilliant write , great imagery
keep penning always
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Good
nocely done. Discriptive, but not overly so. I envy your ability to put much in little. -
ohhh
* does happy lap around the room *
I loved this XD
hi 5
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interesting
this definitly grabbed my attention. i dont know exactly what i was expecting when i read the title but this met all possible expectations. i really liked the ending "roots wrap around slow melodies; petals faster."
i think it really brought together what your were talking about. it was very nice to watch it unfold the way it did. thank you for sharing. -
This one makes me smile!
The imagery is very well executed! My only critique: perhaps you needn't have begun with the word 'as'... it could have been in the second line instead, so the opening word of your poem has more more more gusto.
Just my two cents.
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Oh, My, God...
This was...wow... This was SOOOOOOO me! Like my whole existence pressed into something so small. Like the swirling touch of life mixed with the foreboding slash of insanity. Beautiful.
~Raven
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Insane....lovely
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Thanks so much!
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How amazing!
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Thanks so much A.L.!
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aw a wonderful write for the promt good luck inthe contest
maralisa
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I really like the way that this ends - you have created such a sense of slow urgency here
good luck!
Polly
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Thanks so much polaja!
Did you get the 2nd half of your screen name from Steely Dan's album titled Aja? -
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No, I didn't know there was an album with that name my name comes from a mix of Polly (me) and Rajah (Jasmine's pet tiger from Aladdin)
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