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~Morning's Dawn~

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Do I count your love

and make it known? and breathe in

tender moments shown.

　

 

 

from which you came.

like a Blue bird or a Jay; suddenly

perched gently upon my heart singing

songs of gaiety……of lover’s praise,

　

 

 

oh my soul does stir within,

never sighing; but gathering utterances

of your true self from your lips to mine

　

 

 

for it is the sunrise

that clearly speaks to us, holds us beyond

the shadows, as we see it’s gradual

gaze.

　

 

 

so slight,

Impedes the darkness, solitudes

calls deep unto deep; pleas to thy heart

open doors of welcome my sweet.　

 

 

let us….let us not depart.

　

 

 

Do I count your love;

and make it known? to breathe in

tenderness of moments shown?

 

 

Or does the sun take “love”

when it sets?

　

 

my hope is for not; my heart

does speak like the birds in morning’s dawn

and in the silence of my very soul

 

 

its whispers.

 

 

 

“I welcome thee my Love”

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  • sinfull
    September 7

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    lovely pen

    I really like this line..."we see it’s gradual gaze. " Very poetic Such a deeply visual write...heart feltemotion suits you. well- done!


  • Xianaria gold member
    August 9

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    Lovely images enhance the beautiful write, a truly wonderful read. Gorgeous, Rend ~ simply gorgeous. I love the ending, "I welcome thee my Love" ~ an embrace any heart would love to hear.

    ~ Tim


  • SteveS gold member
    August 4

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    Very nice Rend. I am particularly fond of the sun's "gradual gaze" upon rising. Beautiful word groups throughout. The use of the word "thee" in the last line emphasizes the grand tone and depth in this write. Very enjoyable.


  • chael
    July 25

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    At this point in life

    love escapes me, I find this very well written but alas I no longer care about love.....chael And Kill, kill is about a friend who is sometimes very hard to have around, I mean I'm a bit negative but this guy, yikes.....


  • Swan song gold member
    July 11

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    oh my a delicate and lovely lover you truly must be!!!!!! This was baby soft anf beautiful delicate as a mountain lily in full bloom dear!!!!!!


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    July 8

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    Do I count your love;
    and make it known? to breathe in
    tenderness of moments shown? ...it's whispers. "I welcome thee my love"...what a beautiful love poem you have penned here, Rend!

    Blessed Be,
    Jeremy


  • jackreed3 gold member
    July 6
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    Pure love.. from pure words...
    great write... JackReed3

  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    June 19
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    This is such a beautiful and loving piece...it has a sense of serenity to it...the reader can feel the love and warmth off of each line...nicely written, Rend...

    Blessed Be,
    Jeremy (raven)


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    June 15

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    A beautiful work of art
    This is so well penned and you've constructed that beauty with your use of sweet emotions and imagery.

    Fantastic poem


  • awannabepoet
    June 14

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    Speaks of love that would be a light as the feather of a bird for the words glide effortlessly off the edge of my tongue. I feel like I poured a pristine glass of mountain spring water and watched the sun rise over the horizon.

    I so love how you write your poems and am very sorry I did not find your poems sooner. You have been very kind and generous to me with your priase and encouragment.

    Please do allow me to apologize for that.


  • Poesing
    June 8
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    I really admire people who can write such lovely love poems. Very beautiful.


  • DolceVito gold member
    June 6
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    Beautiful


  • Maxboy gold member
    June 5

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    Wow, very, very nice Rend. You have done a wonderful job with this, breathtaking.

    Beautiful Sis
    Bro


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    June 5

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    Amazing hun
    I am in awe with your beautiful words
    Your feelings are strong
    Best wishes Julie x


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      June 5
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      Thank you soi much for stopping and for the applauses,
      Blessings to you

      Rend


  • alivefromlove
    June 5
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    aww... This is such a beautiful poem!! GREAT poem my friend


  • adsaige
    June 4

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    Your Mentor Review,

    The first stanza could be reworked so that it doesn't seem as awkward. The punctuation makes it know that the line is a complete thought, so you can put it below the line or remove it completely. It is extraneous but cute.

    Ah, reading through completely, I see the repetition of it.
    Lovely.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      June 4
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      Thank you so much, i shall look into the changes thank you once again
      Blessings always

      Rend


  • thepoetssoul
    June 4

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    This is a wondrerful poem, lovely indeed.
    Thanks for sharing your poetic heart.
    Smile always

    Tony

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      June 4
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      Tony,

      thank you so much for stopping,
      your presence here is always a pleasure
      Blessings to you always
      Rend


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    June 4
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    One of the most powerfully romantic pieces that I've read in a while.


    mj.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      June 4
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      Its a great pleasure to have you come and read,
      I have missed you Michael,

      Blesssings

      Rend

  • silverfish
    June 4

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    it's like you can hear the music behind the words, or maybe that's my ipod. nice work ms. r. -silverfish

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      June 4
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      Probably your IPOD cause i hear music too, Thank you so
      much for your comment and applause's, as always a pleasure
      for you to come by,

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Swangrnv gold member
    June 4

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    WOW

    An absolute beauty of a write! sweet words expressed that flow across the page like a feather descending to earth.. to come to rest ever so lightly as wisps from a summer's breeze..


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      June 4
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      your comment is a poem on its own, Beautiful!
      thank you so much my sweet friend,
      many Blessings

      Rend


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 4

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    "my hope is for not; my heart
    does speak like the birds in morning’s dawn
    and in the silence of my very soul


    its whispers."

    oh, this is beautiful

    love, lane

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      June 4
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      to recieve such a comment as yours
      is a blessing. and applauses are a added
      gift,

      thank you so much,

      Blessings and love
      Rend


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    June 4
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    wow, sis, this is marvelous. I absolutely love the flow and the beauty of love you portray. bravo!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      June 4
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      Hey Sis,

      Thank you, your encouragement means
      so much to me. and your applause too

      Blessings

      Rend


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    June 4

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    Oh simply enchanting.

    I love this Rend, love it.

    Thanks for sharing s

    Passions


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      June 4
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      thank you for reading! i so appreciate you
      coming by to read and applause.

      Blessings

      Rend

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