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Love At First Sight (175 word fiction, June 2009)

David entered his bosses' unoccupied office and dropped off the financial report he'd worked on all week. Though Mr. Jenkins had left for the day to attend to personal business, David was not technically alone. A photograph of a beautiful, smiling woman captivated David as he stood before it, staring at her glowing face which peered back with an enchanting gaze. Had he been a romantic he would have sworn that his heart skipped a beat, but obeying the laws of reality, he accepted that what he felt was merely sensory overload.

Short brown hair, a tapered chin, her smile, demure and yet outgoing. She had soft, expressive eyes and her lips weren't full or pouty, but they complimented her eyes...and he was sure what they most urgently needed were to be kissed.

And that is how his boss found him, standing in his office, employing a full, puckered kiss -- his nose steaming the glass that protected Mr. Jenkins' wife from David's yearning lips. It was hard to explain his indiscretion to his boss, and I'm sure it wasn't much easier the next day when he described it to me while sitting in front of my desk at the unemployment office.


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  • Your imagination's off the chain ... you rock

  • arnal
    July 22

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    Oh, that's funny. A nice tale and interesting unexpected ending to go along with your piece. You told your tale well,enjoyed


  • Melodies
    June 5

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    A story of romance and yearning that took the main character on a trip down the stairs...

    lol The boss's wife would hire him in a snap, I am guessing. He could be useful in some way, surely. The story might take a turn... 10 years later, the boss has died of a heart attack and David attends the funeral where he sees the widow and gives her his condolences and things advance from that point I love your stories.


    • Yemassee gold member
      June 5
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      I'd write the sequel but you just did... Thanks! That dancing emoticon always gets me


  • Ms-Mouse
    June 5

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    That cheered me no end! I must put that up on the club wall, thanks for a great story.

  • A Shocking Tale of Tomorrow

    and yet a lesson for all who may one day walk in your old shoes ... A good little fiction story that kept this reader's attention! j y


    • Yemassee gold member
      June 5
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      Yes, a moral for all those who would kiss photographs!

      Thanks.

  • Aaaaaaaahhhhhh!
    Yem at his best,
    laying bare David's heart,
    capitulating to emotion,
    bam!

    Oh, you are a wonder!
    And you let it spill out on the page!!

    Bravos by the bundle!

    M-C2K

    • Yemassee gold member
      June 5

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      David which sounds a little like Maynard is given to obsessions like his Yemish creator. Sometimes the urge is there and whether real or just a photograph, lips are made, in part, for kissing.

      • That was my impression----that reaching out and touching!!!!!


        • Yemassee gold member
          June 5
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          I was just having fun. How are you?

          • You always make your fiction seem fun and easy,
            I, on the other hand, had to figure out how to
            have five guys break out of a locked walk-in-cooler!

            • Yemassee gold member
              June 5
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              Did you add to your story? I think last night Mariza mentioned that you had but then I forgot about it. I'll go see. You really need to be obvious with me when you do. I don't always pay attention to every word people tell me.

          • Sounds good, you having fun!!!

            I am the food prep queen
            after spending the last three hours
            getting everything ready for tonight.


  • angelica silver member
    June 4

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    Oh gosh Yem, fancy getting caught by his boss kissing his wife through the glass. I bet the unemployment bloke had a good laugh after he left. Great story my friend.

    Love angelica


  • bigperm gold member
    June 4

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    bravo, I gotta play catch up with more of your stories...

    As far as the sly David is concerned, it would be totally worth it. I wonder if the fluisy of a wife got dropped?


    • Yemassee gold member
      June 4
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      Well, it was just her photo. But that is a valid question now that I think of it.


  • pixiestix gold member
    June 4

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    Poor David lost and getting caught in his daydream. I guess his boss didn't buy his explanation. I think I'll see if I can get a job at the unemployment office so I can hear interesting stories like this. lol

    Good one Yem.


  • gaze
    June 4

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    Ah, was he kissing her framed photo? Man, the scene you describe is funny, tragic, but funny. Now the boss is a jerk, Davis wasn't really kissing his boss' wife
    Luck for the boss it was David and not Dave

    You and stories, always a good duo


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 4
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    love, lane


  • wattle silver member
    June 4

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    Yes. We do like our short short stories. They never come to any good, but then personal romance is always a risk. --- Thank you Mr Yemie man.


  • hugh wyles silver member
    June 4

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    Dear Yem,

    A brilliant piece of narration of exemplary conciseness and mounting tension towards the final climactic phrase: ".... at the unemployment office."
    The portrayal of the vengeful Mr. Jenkins as a tyrannical, overbearing, unforgiving, possessively jealous oppressor of the working class is done with telling mastery.
    The reader is left with one question hanging in the air:
    Did the lustful David get another job?"

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