the town i have created
within walls of cranium
knows not of boundaries or rule.
the book of moral teaching
was burned page by page,
cauterized to ash:
here, right or wrong
is seldom defined.
what is to be said
of my sin that lies
scattered in gray matter?
insanity will be my plea.
Author notes
prompt: entropy
chose the third definition
m a t t e . s m i t h
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best part is the last line...
insanity will by my plea
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insanity will be my plea.
lol. Very clever. And a definitely enjoyable read.
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this is one of my favorite's by you for sure!
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nothing is to be said ina world where there are no boundaries.. chaos will ensue and consume... brava.. wonderful piece that made me contemplate a world without stucture..
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this is pretty good, I have those same feelings sometimes...Good job on the gold, this deserved it.
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Thank you for entering!
"the book of moral teaching
was burned page by page,"
An amazing couple of lines, I took these to be quite philosophical as most things relating to the Bible are.
Although I felt you let these two magnificent lines down by droning - you did need a much stronger ending to pull these two lines to their own glory!
However a well deserved gold, and brilliant for a quickie indeed!
Thank you for entering!
Sophie.
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burned page by page...
I asked a junkie sage what he thought about the end of the world one time. He started a fire in a metal bucket, and sat down with a very theatrical air and a newspaper in front of it. Over the course of an hour he read and burned every page in the paper. Then he ate an apple, and threw the core into the flames. After dusting off his hands v e r y s l o w l y.... he turned to me with a smile and said "It would take quite a while to burn the entire world that way, wouldn't it?"
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thank you very much, neat story
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you are incredible.. jeesh.
the town in my cranium has a library of books, mostly filled with empty pages, and the moral one has a few pages left in it... slowly being ripped out to be shredded.
my plea is guilty as charged.
great write... not that i expected less than perfection
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keep your book of morals - i may need to borrow it sometime.
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and i thought i was saving those few pages i have left for you... but sure, feel free to borrow. keep in mind there will be a late fee if not returned.
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Sorry... I can't help myself on this one.....
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whaaaattt???? lmao
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It's hard to rule your heart, or your head. lol
Really good work Matt.
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great take on the prompt! Very good imagery....
becca
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Interesting write. I love the way you used 'gray matter' instead of brain. Best of luck.
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You can't go wrong with anarchy in one's title lol
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i liked the original title better actually maybe i'llchange it back 'faeries, princesses & dandelions" lol
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it's so.. so.. foo foo
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love that... foo foo??? lmao.
i liked that title too.. i was wondering what 'faeries, princesses & dandelions' was going to be about.
maybe we should challenge him to write something with those three things. hmmmm.. ummm... nevermind. lol
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smart ass....
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lol the title got me a lot of views.
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