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falling for you
remember when we made love on your parents bed
you told me that you would love me forever
remember our first kiss
you held me close and refused to let go
remember when we first met
you said everything about me was captivating
but no...
you dont remember
yet you remember enough to tell your friends you "scored" a hot girl
i was just a toy
to be thrown
a w a y
i bet you notice the scars on my wirsts
hunny those are for you
i bet you notice the tears on my face
baby those are yours
i bet you notice the blood on my shirt
sweetie thats our anniversery present
pain
but no...
you just see a girl wearing black
and crying
well when i die
baby i'll think of you
when i cry
hunny i love you
when i fall to the floor...
sweetie im gonna remember you
and just to let you know
i've always been dead.
Author notes
this is pretty awesome rite???? this didnt happen to me........ well it kinda did but not this bad. and again this is one of my favs and for ppl who havnt read scars and tattos..... if u liked this 1 u shood enjoy that 1 2 
she slits her wrists hoping to die puts the gun to her head and at last she is dead
i just read that line and it reminded me of this poem
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sooo........ how emotional was it on a scale from 1-10?
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oh my god.... i love this so much... idk wut happen 2 me.... i use 2 b as gewd as u... but i crashed nd burned.... =(
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i LOVEEEEEEEEEEE it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Beautiful!
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oh.. its all usual and old stuff inlove
bring something new.
every write about kisses and touch..
bring something original
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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awesome poem
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I really liked this, it is beautifully penned with some lovely images and great expressed emotions...
I especially loved these lines:
''i bet you notice the scars on my wirsts
hunny those are for you
i bet you notice the tears on my face
baby those are yours
i bet you notice the blood on my shirt
sweetie thats our anniversery present''
very poetic and moving
''how emotional was it on a scale from 1-10?''
it's hard to say because it did touch me but to judge how emotional it was...hm, I'd say a solid 8/10...
good job
take care
Suza
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that was my favorite part to. thanku for that comment
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ok I love this I like the slight use of dirty pretty well done
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on a scale of one to ten
i would give this a ten
sorry im actually crying right now
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I would say this scales a ten on the scale
Often when one gets hurt we blame the other yet young girls believes everything the young boys tell them even when they have been warned by those who loves you i your family you choose to ignore them along the way .Young men well I have been there myself and can tell you if those boys are still in school and they keep persuing you to have sex then they are after just the sex and will tell you exactly what you want to hear to get it . Young ladies needs to say no and not worry if they walk away for if they do then you have saved yourself from all the pain that comes with agreeing to make love to another so young and still learning what love truly is . They at that age only wants to practice honey so be not the doll they can use be strong and have pride in yourself and say no and keep an eye out in school and you will see how quickly they move on from girl to girl .Today AIDS is so easily contracted and honey never let a boy and his lies take your wings away
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So sad and very touching here, just so emotional and powerful
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wow
atm this poem is really really emotional
way past 10.
It was a brillitnat wirte. I am sure Niki would of loved this. She's always liked dark writes just like me.
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