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So Many Shimmering Pools, Guys

 
 

 

 

Yes, beware-

there are so many shimmering pools, guys...

my advice?

 

lose yourself in but one…

 

I know, guys, that it is in our nature,

our very fiber and essence,

maybe the basis of our very existence

to go boinging around

from pool to pool in hyper-drive,

tasting all there is to taste,

sowing all that we have to sow

[and why is it that we have so much to sow?]

...but pools are meant to be savored long,

maybe forever, definitely slow under the sweltering heat,

as one…

 

For, you see,

there is far and wide,

and there is deep…

 

Explore the deep, guys…

 

 

 

 


 

 


 

 

 

 

 

 

this bit of wisdom inspired in some mysterious mystical unknown way by DeJaBlue 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • janeofdreams silver member
    June 19

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    Football, Swim Team, and Ethics 101

    For some reason I thought it was "go long", but that may be regional. Football has little to do with pools of thought, perhaps "go deep" is better. Still waters do run deep, as is hinted by your side image.


    • wbiro gold member
      June 22

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      da! (as a frustrated Russian says)... I'm changing the title back from "Go Deep, Guys" to "So Many Shimmering Pools, Guys"... too much pigskin in the former...! (the message is lost in the cheer of the stadium...) but then again... I may be going back and forth on the title for a long while... same between "go deep" and "explore the deep"...

      • janeofdreams silver member
        June 23
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        When it inspires Russian, it's deep!

        The skirt tried to skirt the issue, but her skirt became entangled. Well, "shimmering pools" are nice and they fit the image. "Deep" is the quintessential expression of what your writing is. Probably too deep for me, but I embarrass easily, so I went with the water....


  • Still Standing gold member
    June 10
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    Perfect

    This really a prolific write. Something for the masses to read. I enjoyed the cynical way u spoke to the men about dipping in all those pools and ended with go deep. Love it!

    • wbiro gold member
      June 11
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      you know, in my memory that last line "explore the deep, guys" always comes out as "go deep, guys"... (too much NFL?!) I might as well change it and get it over with...

      • Still Standing gold member
        June 11

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        U didn't have to change it on my account. Just cuz I'm old and can't remember what I just read. I liked Explre the deep. But go deep works too. Oncve again prolific!


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    June 7

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    Excellent

    'tis a very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your self quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • eleno
    June 6

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    wow, true. . although a rarely followed advice, but i think at some points this wisom comes to every guy.

    good stuff

    • wbiro gold member
      June 6
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      I just had a thought- maybe if you just 'look' at a guy like you're a shimmering pool... (you know, mind-control...)


      • eleno
        June 6
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        lol i am one already , i have a boyfriend, over two years, very in love know wat u mean, tc


  • Javid
    June 6
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    I really enjoyed this. Now Im gonna go find myself a pool, man...


    • wbiro gold member
      June 6
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      lol, if I changed your perspective, then I apologize... well, just take a big breath before you jump...

  • ignored-introvet
    June 5
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    is this ment for guys as in boys or both sexes...its great advise.......especially for boys


    • wbiro gold member
      June 5
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      yes, it was for the guys (boys), all those oats to sow and they miss the deep...


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 4

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    when you are inspired...you are outstanding

     

    love, lane


    • wbiro gold member
      June 4
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      if only everything you said was absolute... lol


  • demon.known
    June 4

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    For, you see,

    there is far and wide,

    and there is deep…



    Explore the deep, guys…

    that was a really good poem and advice. good way to end it of. Good job!


    • wbiro gold member
      June 4
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      thanks, I guess you should spread the word... lol the world will be a better place...


  • drunk in traditions
    June 4

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    And why is it that we have so much to sow?

    Who knows? But very nicely written.

    I'll be savoring these shimmering pools.

    Thanks for the advice and good luck on future writes.

    • wbiro gold member
      June 4
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      I think we must fight nature in a civilized society...! and so it must be, but with the prospect of deep, I don't think it is all that bad... deep is, after all, the cure for such insecurities (as if we're missing out on something if we aren't the (flighty and shallow and ultimately miserable) "far and wide" types)...


  • Antebellum
    June 4

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    "Yes, beware-
    there are so many shimmering pools, guys...
    my advice?"

    Really like how you started this.


    • wbiro gold member
      June 4
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      thanks, and, needless to say, the far and wide types never stay long...


  • Daizee silver member
    June 4

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    Very nicely said...now if more would just practice this little tidbit of advice

    Stacy


    • wbiro gold member
      June 4
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      maybe they shall now, maybe they shall... and thanks...


  • LAPoe gold member
    June 4

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    excellent advice to men everywhere .. just make sure the pool you're swimming in is clean! you don't want your tadpoles in some skank's pool


    laurie


    • wbiro gold member
      June 4
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      lol leave it to laurie to point out the "no swimming" sign... (to no avail, of course...)


    • DeJaBlue gold member
      June 4
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      Haha! I didn't think of it that way...but that'd be more like a pond (you know..with scum and all that), wouldn't it?

  • DeJaBlue gold member
    June 4

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    Why, thank you, Mr. wbiro! You have offered some very wise advice here...it should be strongly adhered to...

    I think I like those last four lines the best

    • wbiro gold member
      June 4
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      "you like the last four lines the best" I will take as "please make the middle part more clear"... lol and I'm going to try... for I can get a little muddled...

      • DeJaBlue gold member
        June 4
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        not exactly ....

        I just felt like the last 4 lines just sent the message home, lol....I think more guys should 'explore the deep' a little more

        • wbiro gold member
          June 4
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          I think the inspiration was your expression- like you were looking at a far-and-wide type, with a bit of exasperated (and tragic) disappointment...!

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