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breaking dawn.

solar prisms,
refrared beauty.

inching for the edge
breathless heaving,
clawing for exit.

the sky is too blue
and the day is lost.

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  • Gods only child
    July 1
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    very nice!


  • John Doe
    June 23
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    i like the last two lines also, i like the way they contrast.


  • Candy Morphine
    June 6
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    the sky is too blue
    and the day is lost.
    -damn, that is good.


  • aestival
    June 3

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    "refrared beauty" is such a perfect phrase to describe that picture! this whole poem is great, though; it's really intense for so few words and just... amazing.


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    June 3

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    POINTS!!!!!!! i just comment you canse im selfish and i want points!!!

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