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There She Was



 

There she was, so tiny, as if dancing in the distance,
I could barely catch a glimpse of her, or believe she existed;
but there she was, hovering, somewhere between girl and woman…

 

 

She came from a world very different than mine,
her language exotic, her ways strange,
as if having arrived from some far-off faerie kingdom;
yet the feelings I felt were

ancient... yet familiar, perhaps they were universal,

feelings I had myself struggled with,

long ago...

 

 

Her voice found the entrance to my mind,
and though I could understand her well enough,
I had to ponder many strange words
to fully comprehend her fascinating story…

 

 

By the looks of her, which were beautiful,
and by her style, which spoke of social networks and nightlife,
you would think her quite wise and cosmopolitan,
but here she was, in my quite study,
dwelling the softer keys of my piano…

 

 

 

She began to play, evoked melancholy scenes,
her soul deep and resonant in the lower registers,
with a pure and high-pitched ring through the high;
she sung songs of sadness and tragedy-

a striking contrast from the radiance that surrounded from her;

I felt a reaching-out from her voice, in her melodies,
as if she had not found the answers she needed,

and she was here, searching…

 

 

 

 

As she tugged her music across my keys

I was captivated, of course, charmed one might say,
and yet it perplexed me how one so sensitive,
so intuitively intelligent, could sing about such conflict and misery…

Looking at her, one would have thought her happiness guaranteed,

she certainly could not lack for love,
for that was something she could attract in abundance;

 

 

 

I approached closer, being careful not to startle her,
for my aim was to study her expressions,
and I was no stranger to empathy;
the problems she mused on were problems

I felt I could offer some guidance through…

 

Funny, how, when you make a move of concern,
out of love beyond your control, perhaps,
things seem to tumble out of control;
here, I found the closer I approached her,
the more ethereal she became;

a defense mechanism, I assumed, where she came from,

or perhaps just a feral instinct, for she was wild;

yet, I had to watch out for myself,

for such creatures have been known to create havoc and destruction...

 

 

I could not help myself, however,
and, as I finally surrendered to the urge to reach out and touch her,
she was gone.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

a sigh, of course, though I was not surprised,

 

for things of such beauty can be flighty,

some by nature, others by choice;

 

 

and as I turned, conceding my failure,

my heart leaped beyond hope, beyond dreams,

 

and against all that I had ever known...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

the story describes my real encounter with the pictured faerie so far... the real-life ending is yet to be determined, of course...

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  • I'll say only this.

    i can see why she gave you gold!


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    June 9

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    wow wow wow I just loved this throughout the poem it made me feel like you were explaining me for some odd reason before I even got to the end

    I loved your creativity of this piece!!

    long poems normally lose my interest but I was hooked throughout and then to find a picture of me at the end well I bloody jumped!!

    awesome!!!

    And yes lets hope she has a happy ending :-)

    this is the most personal thing anybody has written for me I am quite taken back!!

    thankyou so so much and the way you have written this is so poetic and beautiful!!

    xx


    • wbiro gold member
      June 9
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      well, I hope for the impossible- that you can have all the fun you want- and still keep your head together...! and disappearing is something we do here on the Internet... so initially it was a sad ending... but I can stay sad for only so long...


  • Daizee silver member
    June 4
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    Enchanting

    • wbiro gold member
      June 4
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      your comment is worth some stars... just wondering if the piece held you to the end, because it is kind of long...


      • Daizee silver member
        June 4
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        It did..and broke my heart a little at your ending

        • wbiro gold member
          June 4
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          awe, hmmm... maybe I should add a little surprise ending... something joyous even, for life has too many sad endings already...

          • Daizee silver member
            June 4

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            It's always the tragic endings that we seem to flock to. Some sick desire to have our hearts broken maybe? hm.. lol


            • wbiro gold member
              June 4
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              (and hopefully it will put a smile on your face...)

            • wbiro gold member
              June 4
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              hey, a comment that I can give you the stars that I wanted to give earlier... anyway, OK, I added a little surprise ending (and frankly, I like it!)


  • DeJaBlue
    June 3

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    Oh...I like this. Captivated til the end..then a little sad. I found myself wishing you could have touched her.

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