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To see [a]side[s] of self.

Missing image

 

 

 

 

 

i am crushed symbolism

before i am human

and i find myself charred

when considering a beginning--

 

i'm a left-over shade

of others' diminished responsibilities,

that glows unevenly in tepid air;

where satan smells profit

and so savours the increments

of my ideals

 

to reveal deliberate flaws

within my frame:

 

i have a punctured heart

and my lungs

run to rhythms of losing self

 

while i cry as cinder

to the words of a stolen girl,

who stored her despair

in a multitude of intonations

 

whilst denoting her dreams

to a scream of a frown.

 

i become diverse, as i dodge

realities

that play me pure:

 

i am merely the scent

of my own sound...

 

unknown until formed as freak

beneath waxy sighs.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • sideways hourglass
    June 5

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    The ending image has to be one of the most poignant, original images you've ever come up with. And the fact that it's so simple is what makes it even more brilliant. Actually, the last four lines were stellar "I am merely the scent of my own sound" - loved the play on the senses. The whole thing was pretty damn good though.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    June 5

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    Ahh so perfect. A very emotional write. I felt strength and weakness, the inner fight that goes on in us all.
    Brilliant writing.
    Thanks so much for your entry
    Gaylene


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    June 3

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    It's if I can feel the pain in your words..I can relate well to the following stanza..

    i have a punctured heart
    and my lungs
    run to rhythms of losing self

    Very well written piece..Best of luck


    • Laura Lamarca gold member
      June 3
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      i'm glad you were able to "feel" this piece...my intention as a poet, if not to paint a picture with my words that my audience can each take a significant meaning from, is to allow them to feel the emotions that run through my words and inbetween them. it's how i connect to those who read me - by giving them the tools to be able to relate my words to themselves through emotion, if not through words alone. thank you for taking the time to read and comment and also for the applause.