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I only offer you desecration

 

 

I hear your yearning,

joy and despair,

but cannot know your pain,

neither complexity

of your dream

nor depth of anger

 

your yearning walks 

virgin ground, your dream

precious; both mingled

with longing and hurt,

concentrated

at core

of your heart

 

 

in mind's eye

and, with some sense

of knowing, I hear

sound--

your ache and craving; nostalgia

reaching hollow places,

where I fear to tread

 

churning rages,

like waterfall careening

over cliffs

into valley below--

life's trail . . .

 

know-- I want to offer you

comfort and peace,

but,

I am ill-equipped

and inadequate;

 

your yearning, joy and despair

seems sanctified;

my intrusion,

an act of desecration

 

but, I know my God can.

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  • I am ill equipped and inadequate..the honesty and the intimacy of the words are very truthfully desgined..very strong images are here..well done..


    • FransB gold member
      June 10
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      Thank you sincerely. You have received some wonderful poems - one cannot write these without a relationship or being reminded of how incredible He is. Frans

  • What is a poet?

    It is my humble opinion that anything written that causes the spirit to sing and exalt in itself and its existence is poetry. Descriptions of beauty refined in the furnace of our loneliness and despair with the intention of comforting like spirits vexed by a painfully unpleasant experience called life. Best Wishes. You have a nice smile. You reminded me of John Denver, the great singer songwriter.


  • MargaretG
    June 3

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    I like the respect and sensitivity this shows for the unknown contours of another's suffering. My feeling is that merely offering comfort is comforting, and the perfection of God seems far-off at times. Best wishes and good luck.


  • estbelle gold member
    June 3

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    I don't know what to say really
    just simply in awe...

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