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Leisure

The shower amused me clean.

He was jovial pink and waiting
in the kitchen.

‘Fancy a nutty beer and a crunchy fish finger?’
he asked.

‘I am most fond of a wealthy catch’,
I replied.

He caught me and reeled me in
right that instant,
with a tightly bound hug.


 

 

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  • londiscarpenter
    September 13
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    I likes this. No other comment.


  • individuality gold member
    June 29

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    a good poem, mmm nutty beer and crunchy fishfingers, well no wonder this man won you over, how could a girl resist such an offer.


  • Antebellum
    June 26

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    "The shower amused me clean."

    wonderful opening line.
    thanks for taking the time to enter.
    Good luck

  • piccola silver member
    June 19

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    I love this from beginning to end. The amused me clean was a refreshing change of pace. Thank you for entering.


  • MissyYates
    June 9
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    I love how the shower amused you clean..lol. Very Cute


  • sinner-
    June 4
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    a very enjoyable read... nicely written.


  • chloris
    June 4
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    this is cute.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 3

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    great opening line and love the word jovial!!
    Great job and best wishes in the contest.


    Delila


    • Emmyb gold member
      June 3
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      thanks Delia. yes i thought it was quite a fun word too!


  • Keith
    June 3
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    Unusual, and original. Shouldn't it be "right that instant" in the last stanza?

  • dx d by me
    June 3

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    One of the best opening lines I've read in a long while. Very nice! The whole thing is a smiler, refreshing. Enjoyed this little peek of living! Geo

  • Rowan gold member
    June 3
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    too clever,and cute...


  • sweet arrival gold member
    June 3

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    a shower that is amusing should be how they all are... oh, that is a great opening line.
    i enjoy getting bits and pieces of your life, so uniquely said, but using such little space. my bits and pieces tend to go on and on.

    i love your writing, but you already know that since i tell you in almost all my comments


    • Emmyb gold member
      June 3

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      Yeah I know you are very complimentary, I think my head gets bigger with every comment though I always look forward to hearing from you.

      Your poems do not go on and on. Some of mine are just as long.

      this one however was just about coming home to my fiancee and noticing the cute little moments I had

      Thanks for your beautiful words as always. x


      • sweet arrival gold member
        June 3
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        you seem to have a very level head and my comments aren't going to change that, silly. i say it like i see it, though. i happen to enjoy the glimpses of these little moments... hoping one day to have a few to write about myself

        • Emmyb gold member
          June 3
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          Duno - that last poem you wrote blew the socks off me.

  • piggyback
    June 3

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    The first line is brilliant. Absolutely so.

    I love the next couple lines - very cute. The day-to-day topne you use in this poem, especially in the middle, is effective and powerful. I love how you choose your words.

    "‘I am most fond of a wealthy catch’,
    I replied.

    He caught me and reeled me in
    right that instance,
    with a tightly bound hug." -- aww I'm jealous right now Hehe, not really but you bring the hug to life so very very well.

    Awesome poem.

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