Rainbow veins, broken wings and sometimes shattered things- that's breathing, and crying, and smiling till your ribs hurt, and living.
It's loving with all you got, and giving with all you have- its summer love, its exploding galaxies, its all of the lonely nights trying to find yourself- its growing up and texting and feeling and learning, and hoping and dreaming.
It's life.
A contest entry
- How much can you say in just a few lines? by reckless abandon.
700 points, ended June 21, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything and everything by Minstrel-Morose.
1200 points, ended June 28, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I do like what you're saying in this, it really works as a poem and I wouldn't really change anything about it. Its out of the ordinary pattern of poems I usually read which is a very good thing =) thanks for entering!
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i think maybe in the title you should get rid of 'so', just cause it takes the impact away a little if you don't.
LOVE THE MIDDLE!! the end is really good too. i really like how your poetry is becoming a little shorter. trust me, i loved it before just as much, it's just it took too long to read so a lot of the times i just had to skip some pieces as i was strapped for time.
note: all the 'its' in the middle should be 'it's'
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