Your hair is perfectly tamed, and shimmery
Your eyes are the colour of the ocean
Each freckle rests on your cheek patinetly
Until it dances elegantly as you chuckle
Your shirt hugs your tanned, and toned body
Your feet tap so effortlessly to the music
Those around you delight in your presence
You're the most handsome man by far
And I feel nauseous just looking at you
For inside stands a headstone so deep
Where your empathy, and love lies to sleep
I'd love to banish you from all exsistance
Your words through my heart like bullets
Forever praying that I would fail myself
Nobody, but I, know what you hide inside
To me you are the ugliest man by far
Author notes
Prompt: Option 1.I'm sick of reading love poems...instead, tell me why you DON'T love someone anymore
I hope this is OK for your contest.
A contest entry
- 4 Different Options by DeepDarkDesire.
700 points, ended June 3, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Honest
But still your grammar is incorrect in some places; exsistance/patinetly or where your lines don't lead in to one another. Other than a few elementry mistakes this piece is beautifully basked in honesty and reveals your agenda late in to the piece which wraps it all up nicely. This is an interesting take on the option, one that I expected to see however, this is the first one I've read so far. Good effort though, good luck!
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I think we have all known one of the wonders! I love the honesty and depth of this write...how you pointed out all the pleasantries and then spotlighted the bitter graphic ugly truth! GREAT JOB!!!
Az
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