The night sky never looked so beautiful.
And the stars,
(They were just for us.)
Moonlight and cigerettes
Highlightwhispered conversations
Cocooned in concrete comfort.
It was [almost] perfect.
(But the flaws made it so.)
And those hands that looked so rough,
Accompanied by those eyes
(you almost looked right through me)
And I kept silent.
"Here's to making it count..."
I [almost] said I love you.
But almost,it seems, never quite cut it.
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A contest entry
- preliminary round; i wear a halo when you look at me. by innocence jaded.xx.
900 points, ended June 20, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great work here
Your imagery and emotions have been penned quite well -
yessss.
i really like this a lottt. though i think it could have been a tad longer, it's still a good piece.
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Perfect Imperfection
Sometimes the most imperfect things just click and together they make a moment perfect. You brought out that in this piece. I've had moments like this so I can relate. Great write. -
so surreal. so...vivid.
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lest we forget...
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