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solid as the sun


up the degrees,
oh baby how the breeze
feels holy

a straw hat shields
my eyes
your surprise is
close

wait a minute



it is summer
all of it in
your hands
spread like
insect wings

the things you'll
do to please me



"stay warm with me?"
I unravel a blade
of grass

next I'll unwind
the whole field



hmm, I hum

is that a yes?
your hands
rest on my
chest, thinking

uh-huh
I smile

you are on top of
me.

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summer

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  • aestival
    July 8

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    aw, this was definitely light & summery. the pace of it was nice -- it really set the mood of the piece.

    reading this made me smile.