Did Lord Byron give you your faith,
In monsters resolute to ringing their wraith?
Did he screw your step sister tasteless
While summoning cruciformed purists?
Did his poetry bring you to listen
To the hip sway of some panting vixen?
Sending your lover mad to the basement
To dwell on horned ghastly ooze rent.
He made his guests wager their souls
As a game, but was it learned favor?
To the weak minds sold & betrayed
Sacrificed to the unholiest savior.
Byron, and guests, summoned a sprig fiend,
and pretended the storm was well planned
And when one and all moved on to preen
He let loose with secret words banned.
Mary, an educated lay to be
Thought the Lord queer to only read
Books that were ancient and taboo
While the others merrily shared in the deed.
A curse, that from that night swayed
From one to all before dawn
And like the good book fervently said
"The will of God's never wrong."
After that night, they were all short lived
Lovers, writers, and even the Lord
Evil can go hardly-soft to semi-liquid
When windows are too clear for nailed board.
Women need babies to be filled with life
Whether by will, or the shortest straw
But Mary made demons before a wife
Her need was of faith, soon to be law.
If you make life in jars, or by love's reciting
Beware of what morning may bring
A creature rebuilt is always worth writing
Bound to your flight, a draft under-wing.
Some have a loose pen-stock
And the hired help to ignore
Your sanity's neck noosed clock
And shocked monsters folk-lored.
My Mary lost all of her heirs
When property couldn't make peace
Compared to the villager's stares
at the mind behind greed's sutured lease.
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Written March 16th, 2004
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Happened up on this in a trip through random poems. Looks like you already got enough feedback and oppinion to choke a horse so I will not inflict mine on you as well.
But I did want to say, it was a very good read that seems to be immensley layered with meaning beyond the individual words of it. Glad random poems brought me here. Enjoyed the visit. -
actually shelly...lord Byron and keats were close friends...had made a bet to write a horror story...yet shelly's wife wrote the story. the sad thing is they died before they were 25 yrs old
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I feel as if, despite my knowledge of Romanticism, Frankenstein, and the lives or the Romantics such as Byron and Shelley, there is something here I am missing, some deeper message that isn't quite getting through to me. If I had the time I would sit here and read this over and over and try to work it out.
Excellent write. I loved the depth and language. It is also a genre all to itself, isn't it? -
holy. crap.
did you watch the movie? or was this by chance a book (i dont recall). though, the movie was fascinating.
always loverly, it has this slow, ghost story cadance to it that i like.
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I'm bereft of intelligence and thus comment, but since this is in the features box...I'll applaud it too.
--Also because it is good. Verily. Message still swimming in vagueness, will attack it at a later date, when it's become annoying and can't stand it any longer.
Mumm.
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It's dark and awesome you know that right ! great job on winning you deserve it was a great peice
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well, once again I see you have taken your mastery of the craft and "spun us a doozy" that is Arkansas talk for WOW...
freda
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Excellent
Horus8...CONGRATULATIONS on winning the Silver!!!! You deserved this award. Great poem written in your own interesting voice. Rhymed beautifully with just the right touch of meter. -
great
Interesting piece. I enjoyed reading your poetry today again you are good. Best wishes anna -
This is really clever- I liked that heaps!
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Hey, this is a good poem! It has great rythym and is very consistence. Still, it doesn't really have the same form as "The Raven". Try entering it other contests, I'm sure it's got a chance. Thanks for entering anyhow.
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This is an interesting write, and discusses the story of Lord Byron and Mary Shelly, Mary who created Frankenstein's monster and Byron who was supposedly a drinker of blood. However I don't see how this relates to Poe or his style of poetry except that they both wrote some maudlin stuff. Still I'm not the judge and perhaps Shadyrose will think it has merit. Good luck in the contest.
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This is an interesting piece with an intriguing concept. Though I haven't heard of the legend or tale this is based on (I'm assuming by the comments it is a legend of the past), but it seems like an interesting tale to look into and find out more about. You wrote it very well with a good use of wording and language, with also good, unique metaphors throughout it. The words delivered very well a certain mood to the poem, which expressed the story even better. Nicely composed and with a good flow and rhyme scheme to go along with the vivid description and imagery. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Great Write!!! the rhyming is fantastic i had to read it twice to understand it but even then it is a fantastic piece !! Good Luck! Jacqui
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Huh, interesting, thanks for the trivia.
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OMG absolutely awesome, made perfect sense to me because I've read the referenced works. Wow, you are great at this. I'm definately going to have to read more of yours.
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So...Lord Byron is to blame for the monsterous birth of that lurching madman? He built her towers of flaming passion and quenched them with lightning wrenched from the angry heavens of lust?
This is one of your more interesting classic-inspired pieces. I enjoyed it. -
Well, Mr Bryon did like the poppy.. ahem.. so he wss definitely off his hat rack!! and poor Mary, well she went completely barking and went for a swim in that freezing pond.. hmmmm I am rambling but haven't had my meds yet.. be still my poor knackered heart.. must take me atenolol.. Abbysinnia
Later nephew..
Gonna go to work now and annoy the inmates
LIKED THE POME BY THE WAY.. SURREAL AND SUBLIME IMAGERY -
lord byron... he seemed kind of whiney. dont you think? i mean, he just used the women who wanted to care about him and show him the 'love' he dreamt of. i have to admit, though, i might be classified as a bit of a byronic hero... this was cool. i like how there was always a rhyme, but the scheme changed. it was complicated, too.
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oh too congested to think seriously....Frank.
i'm off to write a suicide poem..killing myself before noon on the account of six inches...
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Hmmmm...some shock poetry for the senses. I love shock poetry, actually...Jonny Zero here on AllPoetry comes to mind. He is excellent. However, this piece seems a bit convoluted and wandering as it made its way to the conclusion. Maybe that is what you were going for though. Interesting piece.
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While summoning cruciformed purests...should be "purists"
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