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My first attempt at a Haiku

sat on the bench
with tears on cheeks -
dead roses.

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This was my first assignment in the haiku beginners class. So my first haiku what did you think?

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  • TheFailureOfDying
    June 2

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    I like it, simple stuff is always the best to express something as simple as sadness. i always find it interesting how pain can freeze you to a big piece of ice, wherever you are, whoever you are.

    (you should still know that this wouldnt qualify as a haiku because you need to follow the 5 7 5 scheme and they usually dont have human presence on them, perhaps you didnt reach that part in the class, hope you dont take it the wrong way)