No way to know
That for a moment
We were in heaven;
Blind,
Deaf
To the world
In the tingling of nerves
We feel
The others ;
A life-time’s memory
In a moment
Sent on our way
Into a rich world
Connections fading
As we search
For meaning.
Water, nutrition
our focus
As we lose,
Like a faded dream,
The beginning.
Deeper we seek
As generations behind spread
And push us further
Till self
Becomes all
Barriers surround
And frustrated
In a dream we see
Or remember
Truth:
A great tree,
Branches cradling the blue sky,
Dancing to sounds unheard,
A memory of heaven.
Author notes
Really rough. Just an idea of how closely the path of a tree root matches our own progression and although directly connected and critical to the branches of a tree they never glimpse "heaven".
Please tell me what you think
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I've always seen you as the wise one.. This kind of writing only seems to pat me on the head and say "yep you're still learning kid".. I am such an earthy creature though.. And find my focus is better suited within the solace of a walk than shopping . haha.
I wish you well,
Take care,
Cat
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In the tingling of nerves
We feel
The others ;
A life-time’s memory
In a moment
Those words truly sent a shiver through my spine. This is an exceptional piece, very thought provoking.
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I enjoyed this. I would love to read a descriptive poem on the tree metaphor from the final stanza- as another poem.
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You always knew how to express your thoughts in such special way. You did it again here.
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John
Was amazed that no one but a single person before me saw this.
Besides being a good writer of poems, you've become a good philosopher as well, and it is making its way into your writing, for the better to be sure.
I guess AP just isn't the same anymore.
Bravo on this! Great theme, and the layout was just what the doctor ordered for the narrative. Bullseye!
John
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mirror image
I saw an illstration of a tree w/ roots replicating the same ourstretching down as up.
Emotionally I believe WE' stretch as far back into our personal history as our 'Faith, allows us to believe we have an after life.
Cosmicly well written.
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