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Really?

i am fine,
that's all you ever say,
yet i am telling you aren't,
you think i don't see
the red eyes,
or maybe the way
you aren't walking straight
anymore, but instead
your walk has this sad
swing to it, and i see it.

you think i don't see
your lips shaking
when i see you,
or your eyes
glancing nervously
at me when i walk by,
maybe you think that i can't see
your lips before were wide open
now they are sealed shut
with crazy glue.

you are losing your balance
tumbling backwards,
your sight is almost gone
can barely see the truth,
your disintegrating
s    l    o      w    l    y

without knowing it,
just because your pain
hides under everything you are
wearing, it hides under the sea
within you, eating you slowly.

i not only see it
but i feel it, yes,
i feel your destruction.




Author notes

18.) As you smile, i see tears form in your eyes, you may appear strong, but I can see the pain you feel inside. [credit-♥♥Letitia.Michelle]

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  • Sharon Marie gold member
    June 6

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    very nice

    I like the way in the poem how you describe through the eye's

    You take note of the sadness in them

    it's witten on their face the sadness

    it's seen on their lips a frown pehaps

    Its looks as if they lost the balance their stability

    lacking truth going back to old life style

    their nolonger on a strait path

    following on to distruction

    and  feel pain inside greatly

    Thats my  percietption of this great write is about one can feel the debt of a lost soul

    A person lost in them selves almost trapped

    I loved the sway the rymne and the flow the whole poem wraps around

    every verse so that you can distintley see behind the face

    Great write great choice of words

    blessing! 

    Sharon

     

  • Mirrorbox
    June 4
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    Awesome

    That was one of the more powerful poems I've ever seen from you. That was amazing.

  • goalsv
    June 3

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    A very well written and emotion filled poem. So much emotion flows through it as it takes you on a roller coaster of a ride. A good way to let someone know that you can see through their outward looks.

  • midnightblue1272
    June 2

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    Wow.

    Just amazing what you did with that line. I must admit, when I read this I see a lot of my own facial expressions in this. Good one, young poet.

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