Seems like I知 chasing sunsets
Killing all the roses
Bleeding in oceans
And I知 still all alone
Seems like I知 falling hard for you
I want to see that smile
Together all the while
I知 so ashamed of you
Seems like I知 slowly breaking down
Growing into vertigo
Where did my sanity go?
I知 always so alone
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i really liked this piece, especially the first stanza, pure poetry there.
awesome job, i dig it, keep it up
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MEDIOCRE!
The first stanza was 3,000,000% marvelous and then the following it just, sorry, but sorda of a let down. I was so into it because you started with such astounding strength with wording, imagery, and all. But it seems like the further I read the less good the poem became and failed to measure my high expectations formed from reading the first stanza. What this piece lacks (after the first stanza) is everything the first stanza had which was astonishing strength in wording, imagery, and correct capture of concept. You can still say what you said in the last two stanzas just make it as interesting, original, poetic, and powerful. For example, you can speak on how bittersweet your love/ relationship is with this person and how your feelings for him seem to be like mood-swings. I hope you take my advice with consideration of another poet and not personally as a person.
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Beautiful... I can't even describe how wonderful this is... I would tell you my favorite part, but I can't pick one!
Amazing write love <3
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