I want to write ...
and write till my last breaths..
i want to bring it to life..
mold the dreams into wings.. fly, touch the miracle stars and bring it back on earth as your sacrifice...
just to see your smile reach your eyes...
i want to breath into it my soul draw the perfect poem... but i get lost i can't seem to write...
i dont know what goes wrong intoxicating the way
i get lost in the realms of unlimited dreams...
the world quavers as I shiver from their words i push it all back to the darkness of their cold hearts
i call out the moon gently whisper to her" tonight i'll be the moon" for you tonight Aziz
i'll shine
reassure me for the night has been unkind mylove
i promise to be there "Everyone wants to be the sun that lights up your life. But I'd rather be your moon, so I can shine on you during your darkest hour when your sun isn't around.... "
A contest entry
- PREWRITES!! Emotion please!! by Graciee.
550 points, ended November 24, 206 entries
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hu i dont even think its a poem.. im hurting ...tired i really dont wana carry on...
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nice work, particularly 'But I'd rather be your moon, so I can shine on you during your darkest hour when your sun isn't around.... ' - that is a really well expressed line.
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this is really nice
i think you NEEd to keep writing
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your style is awesome
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thanks lilsheep.. look whos talking ur amazing ! im nothing... eh i cant write i havnt wrote anything in forever...its like somethings chocking me
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darkest hour when your sun isn't around....
a moon you shall be as you told this story
with awesome theme I like it so
Hugs Angel♥
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yes i wish i could be...thank you
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well u dont know me and im the first comment you dont want to carry on with it but its done just perfectly takes one right in the heart of the poet and then finishes with such a beautiful statement . i came because of an eye i eyed and so glad i did worth the click .. very nice indeed cheers glenn
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thank you.. i might not now you but your words have touched me... again thank you... it about a love i wish i had... that i dont.. or maybe im to scared to find it or let it get near me because every time i did it destroyed me...
p.s sorry it took so long to respond
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