floating on ripples
pale as a mid-summer’s moon
song of a lily
Author notes
Form; traditional japanese haiku
5-7-5
Zen Poetry
In a list
A contest entry
- Calling all Haijin Give me your best shot Haiku Senru Only by Draig aine.
3000 points, ended June 23, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a sigh
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Ahhhh! I LOVE IT! The lotus is my favourite flower! And what a beautiful description!
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I hope you place very well in the contest. I, for one, would definitely have you in my finalists list.
(Especially since you could get such a reaction out of me with the 5-7-5 format, which I usually dislike. Great job!)
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thanks for the wonderful comment Kin... personally im fond of contemporary/modern haiku...traditional ku, are a real challenge for me to do... I find them very hard to create... I doubt ill ever master them, but i do love to write them just the same.
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I prefer contemporary haiku myself. Most of the time, traditional ku are too wordy. But this one definitely isn't. And it is nice to challenge oneself this way now and then.
And you're welcome. ^_^
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beautiful haiku..perfectly created, I am speechless to descibe.. it's just so lovely!
Jo
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thank you for commenting and the aplause...yes, just like it was in my mind...beautiful~
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What a vision of sublime this paints! Lovely versed Haiku.
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the lilies sing to me
a kiss of night
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very peaceful. I am a lover of the lily padded pond.
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in my youth I spent many times at the pond in evening
gurgle of water against silence
watching the lilies _float_
thanks for dropping in ea
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if this is crap... I'm tissue. I love your haikus.
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now wait...I want to ponder that comment...
ummm
never mind...
ill just keep it covert
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Oh, the "song"--
the surprise"--
true perfection--
and in keeping with traditonal form.
Quite wondrous.
M-C
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beautiful
You really have a talent with this Zen Poetry my friend. Please teach me.
Such lovely visions and emotions you create here with so few words.
Good luck in this contest!
Jeannette
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You are so good at haiku. Great job.
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Beautiful
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Do you not have an end to your amazing talent?!?!?! You are never lost for "haiku" words. Best to you in the contest. Great work!!
Sam
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