Lord, you give my soul peace
You make my heart beat
Bringing a sweet release
As I worship at your feet
In the bright morning skies
You are the one I need
To open up my eyes
To you and not a creed
We will never be apart
Forever in golden streams
I give to you my heart
I give to you my dreams
As I write it down in stone
In you alone I boast
Claiming you as my own
The Father, Son, and Ghost
A contest entry
- Prewrites only- Give me your first and last! by MoonStarRaven.
490 points, ended June 2, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love, pain, Anything just rhyme by LostinLove399.
400 points, ended June 4, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite contest by Blue-Rose Beauty.
600 points, ended November 10, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow nice poem! Great poem, as a fellow believer I appreciate this.
Things to improve:
To open up my eyes
To you and not a creed
That line was a bit awkward, but maybe you were going for that medieval taste.
I love the third stanza especially. Thanks for entering.
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beauty
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Such a beautiful prayer, and congrats on the bronze! well done Michael.
Blessing
Rend
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Congratulations on placing.
peace
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nice poem, i really enjoyed reading it. It flowed lovely and easy reading and had good meaning. Well done with that write.
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very good, flows nicely and has alot of meaning, Best of luck in the contest
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perhapes the ending would sound better as the father son and the holy ghost? just a suggestion but it is your poem so whatever you feel is best is ok with me because this was an absolutely beatiful poem full of greatness. good luck in the contest
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Lena -
I really like this poem it has a wonderful message that was said so beautifully. Thank you so much for entering my contest, best wishes and good luck.
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Amen
A sort of prayer. Certainly between the individual and God. Good words all.
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